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My Meteor

My, my, my meteor Rocks me to my core She stains the sky With shooting star fire Beside the Milky Way Only far, far brighter. She rides rainbows Seesaws on sky scales Sits and smells grass grow Sees the songs of whales. My meteor’s a metaphor Soon you’ll see what for My metaphoric meteor Rocks me to my core. An alphabetic artist She weaves song after song With word worms wriggling From her all day long. I’ve seen her climb clouds Both hands behind her back Then move moonbeams To lay down a light track. My meteor’s a metaphor Don’t you know what for? My metaphoric meteor Rocks me to my core. She splits the silence With her spaced out symphony They spin sound sparks Into streams of money. My metaphoric meteor Shook me off the floor At all the gigs I rocked to On her global tour. My meteor’s a real rock star She lights up the night Then she crashes down, down, down To be my meteorite! My, my, my meteorite, You are still my rock star light. 23rd April, 2016

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Date: 6/15/2016 10:41:00 AM
Daniel, congratulations on your win. Skat
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Daniel Davies
Date: 6/15/2016 4:03:00 PM
Thank you Skat!
Date: 6/15/2016 10:26:00 AM
Way to go, congrats on your win.
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Daniel Davies
Date: 6/15/2016 4:02:00 PM
Thank you Richard!
Date: 6/14/2016 3:27:00 AM
Congrats Daniel, for your top placement with this awesome piece!! :-)
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Daniel Davies
Date: 6/15/2016 4:01:00 PM
Thanks Teddy!
Date: 6/13/2016 4:20:00 PM
Wonderfullly done, It's a hit! Grats on a great second place win!! :)
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Daniel Davies
Date: 6/13/2016 4:56:00 PM
Thank you Casarah!
Date: 6/13/2016 3:50:00 PM
great write, Daniel, congratulations on your win !!!!
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Daniel Davies
Date: 6/13/2016 4:54:00 PM
Thanks Eve!
Date: 4/23/2016 2:58:00 PM
- Welcome to Poetry Soup, Daniel - A skilful first poem, impressive ! - hugs // Sun :)
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Daniel Davies
Date: 4/23/2016 5:27:00 PM
Thanks Sunny! Love the avatar!
Date: 4/23/2016 9:56:00 AM
Hi Daniel, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Daniel Davies
Date: 4/23/2016 5:28:00 PM
Friendship accepted! And please feel free to embellish me with some info about yourself sometime. Thanks!
Date: 4/23/2016 3:40:00 AM
Daniel,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Daniel Davies
Date: 4/23/2016 5:41:00 AM
Hi ~ that's a lovely way to be welcomed! See you in the soup ;)
Date: 4/23/2016 1:49:00 AM
That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Daniel. :)
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Daniel Davies
Date: 4/23/2016 5:45:00 AM
Thank you ~ I thought I was replying to you when I replied to Poet Destroyer A... doh! I'll get the hang of it, eventually!

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