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My Last Sunset

The triple sun set - what a sight, And colours that I’d never seen, My captors chirping their delight. The triple sun set - what a sight, Before the thirty moons of night. My fellow captives: bones picked clean. The triple sun set - what a sight, And colours that I’d never seen.

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Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/13/2011 4:22:00 PM

Great entry. I haven't entered this one. Brain dead. We are all having trouble getting on and getting knocked off Jack. I am glad you keep trying and thank you for your kind comments. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/13/2011 1:10:00 PM

missing u Jack..and your great poetry my friend.. hope all is OK..luv...

Kevin Clark

Date: 8/9/2011 2:07:00 PM

Nice Job Jack. Very creative

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/8/2011 3:05:00 PM

all u have to do to delete a poem that duplicated itself is ..go to your My Poems Page.. then scroll down and I think on the far right side is the delete button to remove ..but .. u will lose those comments Jack..so u best leave it alone.. some of mine duplicate at times..when the system is haywire luv.. luv from the beach ..hot hot today..

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/8/2011 3:01:00 PM

oh, jack... so inviting.. for me?? :) huggs, nette

James Foulk

Date: 8/8/2011 2:37:00 PM

a very creative and well written piece of work.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 8/7/2011 11:23:00 PM

This is so clever and the images are great - had to read it three times. Love it!

Date: 8/7/2011 5:48:00 PM

Interesting use of rhyme and imagery. It feels like a sense of conflict giving the reader something to ponder. Best wishes with your writing. Karen

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/7/2011 3:20:00 PM

wow awesome Jack.. nice use of this form for this new contest..good luck luv.. nice and flowy ..

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/7/2011 2:13:00 PM

Wow, we're thinking alike, Jack. I was going to write one with two suns. Frightening image of your fellow captives having their bones picked clean. Best wishes for success in Paula's contest! Love, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/7/2011 2:01:00 PM

Interesting one..A triple sun set that was a sight..Enjoyed reading your creative work..Thanks for stopping by..I think that this work posted twice..Sara

Nancy Jones

Date: 8/7/2011 1:15:00 PM

Ooooohhhh, I like! Nice work with a difficult form.