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My Last Breath

Come on my last breath won't you walk away ? Why won't you respond to my only pray ? Come on my lonely soul , don't you want to be set free ? Don't you want to break out from the jail inside of me ? Come on my cureless body , don't you want to get released ? Don't you want to have some peace ? I'm tired from this life , why won't you hear ? Why won't you make my wounds and pain disappear ? I can't hold on any more and you know the best... I can't live with a heart that wants to go out of my chest... So come on now , let me go on my own... Let me find a place to call it home... Please you know that I can't stay no more... How could I , when there's no reason or hope to live for ?

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James Inman

Date: 9/14/2016 9:00:00 AM

Nice rhyme Dalia. I was curious why you left. It seems to have been a difficult time for you.

Dalia Shahein
Date: 11/9/2016 7:05:00 PM

Yeah , It was but every bad time eventually will end , thanks dear for dropping by / hugs // :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/12/2016 10:19:00 PM

Such a beautiful poem of expression of loss and hope! :)

Dalia Shahein
Date: 2/13/2016 9:03:00 PM

Thank you very much my dear for ur lovely comment, it's much appreciated, hugs / / :)

White Sage
Date: 2/13/2016 8:54:00 AM

friends are golden gems, losing any brings a sore to our mind, your comment is so much appreciated Arthur

Abdiel Rios

Date: 2/4/2016 10:15:00 AM

I kind of feel the same way

Dalia Shahein
Date: 2/4/2016 10:56:00 PM

Thank you very much my dear for ur lovely comment, much appreciated, hugs / / :)

White Sage
Date: 2/4/2016 6:05:00 PM

pain is felt when the heart gets hurt, but more worse it is when we lose someone, your comment is greatly appreciated dear Abdiel

Jan Allison

Date: 2/4/2016 5:06:00 AM

Such touching words in your rhyme Dalia:-) hugs jan xx

Dalia Shahein
Date: 2/4/2016 7:00:00 AM

Thank you so much my dear for ur lovely comment, hugs / / :)

Michael Whatley

Date: 1/29/2016 7:26:00 AM

Touching, existential words, Dalia! Great use of rhetoric.

Dalia Shahein
Date: 1/30/2016 6:33:00 AM

Thank you very much my dear for ur sweet sweet comment and ur delightful visit, much appreciated, hugs / / :)

White Sage
Date: 1/29/2016 7:10:00 PM

I agree Michael, the words are existential, Dalia writes expressions so well, and am sure she'll be grateful having your lovely comment

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/25/2016 11:42:00 PM

even on that final breath, you should hold on, a deep write Dalia, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. LOVE LINDA

Dalia Shahein
Date: 1/26/2016 2:18:00 AM

Thank you so much my dear, I'm really glad you stopped by to read it . It's much appreciated , thanks again for the lovely comment and the delightful visit , hugs and love // :)

Eric Boddie

Date: 1/25/2016 9:50:00 AM

the greatest hope is death....when the Soul can truly take that first Immortal Breath....because if upon this Earth, the heart remained as pure....then the Spirit Of Life Would Have Final Cure....amazing as always dalia....;)

Dalia Shahein
Date: 1/25/2016 1:15:00 PM

Thank you so much dear one for your delightful comment , it's always such a pleasure to read your beautiful , sweet comments , hugs / / :)

Justin Bordner

Date: 1/25/2016 1:37:00 AM

Obey your heart and your breaths will lead you to the reason of love, into the joy of a new day Dalia...J.A.B.

Dalia Shahein
Date: 1/25/2016 9:03:00 AM

I may try that , thank you very much my dear for ur lovely comment, much appreciated, hugs / / :)

White Sage

Date: 1/24/2016 4:13:00 AM

D...look beyond the visible, hear beyond the whooshing sound of the wind, then you'll discover there's hope...there always is hope dear one, i hope this is fictional...excellent write D, heartfelt

White Sage
Date: 1/24/2016 11:00:00 AM

just always take care dear, i know it's hard losing someone so very very close....

White Sage
Date: 1/24/2016 10:58:00 AM

Dalia Shahein
Date: 1/24/2016 10:48:00 AM

I'm afraid it's not my dear , I wrote it cause I felt depression and anger after my friend's death , I really wish things go better , thank you though for your delightful visit and your pleasant comment, hugs / / :)