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My Fragile Heart

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My fragile heart was splintered by shards of glass The trauma of my ex leaving without a word had cut so deeply I didn’t want anyone else in my life My whole world was in T A T T E R S Many months passed and we met on a balmy summer evening in June The attraction was instant … But your huge blue eyes contained a sadness, which mirrored my own Neither of us wanted to make the same mistake again We’d both been hurt before Slowly ever so slowly the bond of trust grew between us And as time passed we became inseparable That Christmas you presented me with a box I was intrigued as it was far too big for a ring Cautiously I opened it Laying on the purple velvet were two identical gold chains … at the end of each chain was a jigsaw piece - they fitted together perfectly! At that moment I knew I’d found my soulmate for life We placed the chains around each-others neck Where they remain to this very day Contest All the Little Pieces Sponsored by Broken Wings 09~14~16

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Kim Merryman

Date: 9/24/2016 4:26:00 PM

Great write, Jan! I like the part about the chains - so romantic! Congrats on your 2nd place win! Love, Kim

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2016 6:09:00 PM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 9/24/2016 10:05:00 AM

Jan, oh such a beautiful and touching poem and so creative. Congratulations on second place in my contest~

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2016 6:08:00 PM

Thanks Constnace I was inspired by your theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/22/2016 7:50:00 PM

Beautiful, Jan. From life's tattered pieces of loss to jigsaw puzzle pieces that fit and bind together forever...Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2016 6:08:00 PM

Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Jesse Rowe

Date: 9/22/2016 7:05:00 PM

Agnes made a brilliant observation that I initially missed at how even the words themselves speak of our tattered edges matching like a jigsaw with someone else's. Beautiful.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2016 7:17:00 PM

Thanks so much Jesse I thought Agnes's comment was wonderful as I hadn't picked up on that myself - the poem just flowed so easily:-) :-) hugs jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 9/22/2016 5:09:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Jan. I love how you carry through and modify the image of pieces, from splinters and shards to the matching puzzle pieces. Hugs, Agnes

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2016 5:12:00 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment Agnes - I surprise myself with the way my poems turn out in the end:-) hugs jan xx

Dah Dahlusion

Date: 9/15/2016 10:23:00 AM

So fragile. Bravo Poet! ––))

Jan Allison
Date: 9/15/2016 11:27:00 AM

Thanks so much Dah:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 9/15/2016 9:59:00 AM

Oh hoe lovely and romantic Jan!Loved it!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/15/2016 10:02:00 AM

Thanks so much Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 9/15/2016 3:50:00 AM

Good luck Jan. Make sure nothing tatters for real :) 7

Jan Allison
Date: 9/15/2016 5:48:00 AM

I've had my heart broken - many of us have, but this is just fiction for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/14/2016 11:49:00 PM

This contest was made for you Jan. What a beautiful story you have created in this charming piece ! 7 ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 9/15/2016 5:47:00 AM

Thanks Connie I hope Constance likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Daver Austin

Date: 9/14/2016 3:41:00 PM

A great romantic happening. So it is true - you CAN go home again. Love, Dave

Jan Allison
Date: 9/14/2016 3:54:00 PM

Thanks Daver I never know where my muse will take me but at least it had a happy ending:-) hugs jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/14/2016 1:38:00 PM

Hi Jan! You really caught my attention quickly with this poem. You describe so well the reluctance to enter a new relationship after feeling those "shards" pierce your heart. I had the opportunity to move on recently, but the feeling you describe made me decide against it. I like the way you ended it with the jigsaw pieces coming together. Very nice!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/14/2016 3:13:00 PM

Welcome back Carolyn I hope you are keeping well. its so lovely to see you here on soup and commenting on my poem - I guess many can relate to the reluctance to enter a new relationship after heartache in the past:-( hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 9/14/2016 12:02:00 PM

Things happen for a reason. great poem Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 9/14/2016 12:03:00 PM

Thanks Tim - just ready your dreamy romantic one too:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 9/14/2016 9:31:00 AM

Almost like a fairy tale romance Jan. I realize it's just a poem but there might be a movie in there somewhere:) Great interpretation of the topic. good luck, Jan:):)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/14/2016 9:38:00 AM

Oh I hope there is a director reading at the moment wouldn't that be amazing she says in her dreams:-) :-) thanks for the lovely comment Daniel:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell

Date: 9/14/2016 8:26:00 AM

great presentation meets the brief and a great poem good luck stephen

Jan Allison
Date: 9/14/2016 8:53:00 AM

Thanks Stephen I hope Constance likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Marion Mwangi

Date: 9/14/2016 6:59:00 AM

wooow this is great. its hard to mend a broken heart but true love always prevails. all the best in contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/14/2016 7:02:00 AM

Thanks Marion I'm not sure if it's what the sponsor is after but I have to go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs jan xx