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My First Crush, Like a Wind

"The wind is the pounding of my heart." By Constance La France
In the crowd I saw someone Quite handsome, all in a haze, so filmy Nothing did I see clearly But a pair of love lit eyes riveted on me My heart began pumping fast and beating As a soft wind fleeing past me Did my face grow pale? Or got colored by a blush? I lowered my eyes and looked away….. But I saw him advancing Coming straight to me My heart began to race, Like a wind gaining force My breath got hitched. My lips went dry and parched. I didn’t hear what he asked. Words got stuck in my throat! As by a whirl wind twirling around me, Felling trees and snapping power lines, My words flew away and I lost all connections….. Unable to move or utter a word! Felt butterflies in my stomach. A tremor took over my hands and legs, Like a tornado shaking me from foot to crown. Beads of sweat appeared on my brow. My mind went blank. Forgot where I was, got frozen in time. All I could hear was the pounding of my heart, Like the whooshing of a storm in mad fury August.5.2022 Let Your Muse be Inspired- R form Poetry Contest Sponsor- Constance La France

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Date: 9/6/2022 11:27:00 PM
Valsa, excellent Romanticism poem beautifully penned and presented. Congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - Let Your Muse Be Inspired, God Bless ~
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Date: 9/2/2022 6:53:00 AM
Congratulations on this great winner. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 9/1/2022 3:17:00 PM
Congratulations on your top win, Dear Valsa. A romantic, enchanting verse - yes, it expresses the pounding of the heart! Love ~ Mala
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Date: 8/6/2022 8:22:00 PM
Valsa, you have captured the very essence of that first REAL attraction between two young people--how one's entire being is affected. Janice
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Date: 8/6/2022 3:41:00 PM
Rhapsodically pondering writing my friend Valsa. The heart is enchanted by sweet recollections of first love. And the top-notch description you provided added still another dimension of splendor to the already gorgeous work you sent. Best for a win
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Date: 8/6/2022 10:43:00 AM
WOW, Valsa, how romantic! Yes, we recall these moments from our teenage years...you have captured magic of one of those moments so well! Your choice of descriptive words is amazing!
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Date: 8/6/2022 8:42:00 AM
You took me back to my high school days, Valsa, when I first fell in love, knees knocking, and lips laughably frozen shut at the most inopportune times. Love does strange things to the human mind and body, and you've captured it better than most. Cheerios Deario, Terry
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Date: 8/6/2022 7:57:00 AM
A true emotional, heart pounding attraction you have written here Valsa. You take the reader on a ride of excitement, Loved this.
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Date: 8/5/2022 4:43:00 PM
Thanks for the trip back to first encounter of all kinds, Valsa. Well written Romanticism. Good luck in the contest my friend. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 8/5/2022 11:13:00 AM
A very apt description! Well said and done! Aloha!
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Date: 8/5/2022 9:19:00 AM
Ah, romance at it's finest! Those awkward moments from our youth we all can recall. You have revived old memories. A great write. :)Paulette
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Date: 8/5/2022 8:32:00 AM
Ah, you bring me back to the scent of youth and the first time I felt like this, there is nothing in this poem that doesn't bring about a lovely kissed moment , thank you for sharing this dear Valsa :)
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Date: 8/5/2022 6:02:00 AM
Romantically ruminating write my friend. Memories of first love are enchanting to the heart. Best to you, Valsa.
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Valsa George
Date: 8/5/2022 6:26:00 AM
All of us know how it is like. Thank you for reading and commenting, dear Vijay !
Date: 8/5/2022 3:42:00 AM
We never forget our first crushes Valsa, and that terrible feeling you have. Part of growing up I suppose Tom
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Valsa George
Date: 8/5/2022 6:25:00 AM
Quite true. Every first experience leaves indelible memories.... Thanks a lot, Tom ! Head in for a great week end !
Date: 8/5/2022 1:15:00 AM
Wow. You were literally swept off your fee. HUgs.
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Valsa George
Date: 8/5/2022 6:22:00 AM
Yes, indeed ! Too naive to face such a situation ! Thanks a lot Victor

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