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My Crystal Blue

We walked home Hand in hand You were just a girl me a boy pretending to be a man We held tightly to our nothing Wrapping it fully within the wanting Not really knowing who we were or what we were needing So it was so easy to sink into heavy breathing Me the innocent boy you my ingenue We loved each other for a time It seemed the right thing to do You were my cynosure a crystal blue eyed angel naked and demure Tentatively innocent yet somehow you seemed so sure I wanted you to unlock my sad lonely still I kept looking elsewhere for a cure A panacea for the missing parts inside of me So I searched wanting to see my sempiternal possibility Feelings ineffable I wanted so bad to feel full Why couldn't I hold onto us or resist the pull I was a sad black sheep searching for virgin wool I thought maybe beyond my awkward stammer in the wider world of glamour I could be a mellifluous camper Yet secretly I knew I was neither lissome or free Why did I give up the us in we? Binding myself in a place I was never meant to be There in a chatoyant box locked with a golden key It would take years For me to be able to see What my crystal blue baby seen inside of me In the end knowing I was loveable is what set the boy free You showed me the man I was meant to be! I completed Silent's ten word challenge.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 8/24/2016 1:31:00 PM
A sweetly demure piece that captures the awkwardness, uncertainty and vulnerability of youth. I see some word choices were contest requirements but that just made it all the more interesting to read :-) The title is excellent and you really did a superb job with those words...I 'll go 'read' the dictionary now..lol This was very enjoyable...your skills show wonderfully:-) blessings, lynn
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/24/2016 2:43:00 PM
Thanks Lynn, I was a bit naughty with this one.
Date: 5/20/2016 6:47:00 AM
This is wonderful and beyond awesome. A great write here Richard
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Date: 5/17/2016 11:05:00 PM
Silent wanted me to do this challenge, buuuut ... those words kind of intimidate me ... ha ha. In any case, you sure pulled it off with flying colors ... they felt very natural in the place they were, in the poem. You found the perfect one to dedicate poetry too ... a great piece.
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Date: 5/17/2016 8:23:00 PM
You did this one very well Richard. Verlena
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Date: 5/16/2016 10:43:00 AM
So you in your writing Good luck in the contest. Love Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2016 9:05:00 PM
Love back to you mom.
Date: 5/16/2016 9:07:00 AM
This is indeed a gr8 entry and deserves all the admirations.... Brilliant write... Cheers !
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2016 9:46:00 AM
Good morning and thanks Red. Hugs Rick.
Date: 5/15/2016 8:35:00 PM
wow, this is my second favorite one I have seen using Silent One's words. LOVE this, Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2016 9:47:00 AM
Thanks Andrea, these were words I would never have used in a million years.
Date: 5/15/2016 10:51:00 AM
This is just such a beautiful poem! A7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2016 9:47:00 AM
Thanks Arthur.
Date: 5/14/2016 8:55:00 AM
You not only completed the challenge, Richard, but I hardly realized that you had gone in for it, considering that the suggested words fitted elegantly into place. Excellent! ~ Regards // paul
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/14/2016 9:05:00 AM
Hi Paul, I can think of no greater compliment. Thank you my friend.
Date: 5/13/2016 1:48:00 PM
Such an excellent use of the words, Richard. Congratulations on your meeting this challenge so well with this excellent Rhyme. 7, Sandra
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 6:02:00 PM
Thanks Sandra, I learned some new words along the way.
Date: 5/13/2016 10:15:00 AM
What a write, Richard, Silents ten word challenge really brought out the best, certainly I learned a few new words. This is masterfully done, typically you!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 6:03:00 PM
Thanks John, you are kind.
Date: 5/13/2016 8:20:00 AM
Fantastic Richard.I love this gem.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 6:03:00 PM
Thanks Charmaine. ;0)
Date: 5/13/2016 2:19:00 AM
Love the innocence and growing from start to finish. Lovely completion of the task. You added Silents new colors to your pallet and painted such a sweet scene. I just love nice endings and there seem to be so few. Thanks for writing us one.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 7:54:00 AM
For the most part I too tend to gravitate to happy endings. I guess I am the eternal optimist, I believe in the end God will indeed provide us our happy ending, either in this world or the next.
Date: 5/12/2016 2:03:00 PM
Wow, Rick, you really did a great job! Using all those words was not an easy task, I'm sure. Really turned out nice :) I love the message.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 7:55:00 AM
Hi Becca, I'm pleased with the result. It was indeed a tough one and I hope I used the words properly. Hugs Rick.
Date: 5/12/2016 12:10:00 PM
Beautiful....you rose to the challenge
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 7:58:00 AM
Hi Eileen, sorry for the delayed response, I was travelling home yesterday from Vancouver. I had a couple of beautiful sunny days while I was there. I'm pleased you like this piece. My last two have leaned to the passionate side. They are not to the caliber of the Queen of passion but I enjoyed writing them none the less. Hugs Rick.
Date: 5/12/2016 10:55:00 AM
Whoa! This was fantastic! Brilliant in lines like "Tentatively innocent yet somehow you seemed so sure" Your flow was amazing, this read great!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 7:59:00 AM
You make me blush, thanks Casarah.

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