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More Bittersweet Still

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Below is the poem entitled More Bittersweet Still which was written by poet David Whalen. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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A Marine kneeling in front of a boy A seven year old boy with hands extended barely containing his sorrow Presenting him with a folded flag With quivering chin, fighting back tears In acknowledgement that his dad …Has no tomorrow…

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  1. Date: 2/23/2015 7:06:00 PM
    This scene happens too often, good of you to point that out. To write free verse what you need to do is jump in the water with your life jacket- your life jacket is ALL the poetic tropes- simile, metaphor, hyperbole, personification and synecdoche, if you use these devices you have either written prose poetry or free verse. Hope that helps? Light & Love

  1. Date: 10/26/2012 1:37:00 PM
    hi David nice piece I like the feeling in it, all the best Owen

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    Date: 10/28/2012 4:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Owen! Things like this should never happen and poems like mine wouldn't have to be read.