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What beauty reflected in love's fair eyes, a passion treasured beyond all measure. As ardor stirred flames, I failed to disguise the need in my loins ere want of pleasure. As sweet the music I discern profound, tis more honeyed your lips when touching mine. Oh! My pained heart shall beckon love resound, my moonstruck maiden, unearthly divine. Mute, I cannot be, so near your soft breasts. This besotted man has but scant more breath. Grant me your pure love, not in mere request, but with an angelic kiss 'fore my death. I beg thee allow the stars remain bright. Give yourself to me ere the end of night. ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ January 9th 2016

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Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/5/2023 3:46:00 PM

I hope you're not leaving. I have bern csreful, I think, but your situation will ptobably be mine. I definitely write what I think. I hope you have s site to keep writing. I'll follow if I find it

Lin Lane
Date: 10/5/2023 4:48:00 PM

Thank you for liking my poetry, Hilda. I’ve been in and out of PS a couple of times but I’m back to stay.

Quoth Theraven

Date: 12/24/2019 8:31:00 PM

Lin, I'm glad to find this poem on Christmas Eve. Rummaging around your thoughts and dreams in write..,perhaps should be more reverent? Anyway, I like these two. Reminds me of Romeo & Juliet. Et il ya la lune bien sûr. Merry Christmas Lin Lane. -Richard

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2022 10:59:00 AM

Thank you so much, Richard. Apologies for reading this just now.

Lewis Raynes

Date: 2/20/2018 5:30:00 PM

i want to be in love like this, beautiful Lin

Lin Lane
Date: 12/18/2019 6:02:00 PM

Thank you, Lewis. I'm so sorry I didn't see your comment sooner.

Carolyn Fish

Date: 1/4/2017 12:07:00 AM

Absolutely love this. Perfect. Not a single thing to be improved, and like some others I am a big fan of the more archaic language.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2022 10:59:00 AM

Thanks, an awful lot, Carolyn.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/24/2016 8:45:00 PM

Beautiful poem, Lin. I agree w/Carole, the language was exquisite. I love the OE, it is so romantic. I can see why my poem "Lost Love Divined" appealed to you. A similar poem as this, language wise. Love your work as always. Love you, RW.

Lin Lane
Date: 10/25/2016 9:24:00 AM

Thank you, RW. If there were more poets like you on PS I might still be posting more frequently. I don't allude to your wonderful comments, but instead to your eloquent poetry.

Carole Duet

Date: 10/4/2016 10:17:00 PM

What a beautiful poem! I love it and the Old English you used.

Lin Lane
Date: 10/6/2016 12:53:00 PM

Thank you very much for liking this one so well, Carole.

Dineen Williams Gault

Date: 5/7/2016 7:24:00 AM

Gee, quite romantic, with such a mystical flair. Wonderful write, very much enjoyed, congratulations!

Lin Lane
Date: 5/7/2016 8:04:00 AM

Hi Dineen. I'm very pleased that you like it. Thank you.

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 5/3/2016 5:46:00 AM

A romantic and colorful piece indeed!! I enjoyed it!! Congrats Lin, for your top placement in the contest!!! ;-)

Lin Lane
Date: 5/7/2016 8:04:00 AM

Hello Teddy, and thanks very much.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/3/2016 3:26:00 AM

Very lovely Lin. Congratulations on your top placement. # 7 ; )

Lin Lane
Date: 5/7/2016 8:03:00 AM

Hi, Connie, and thanks so much.

Susan Palli

Date: 5/3/2016 2:57:00 AM

Lin, wonderful words, a beautiful dreamy poem. love it! Congrats!

Lin Lane
Date: 5/7/2016 8:03:00 AM

Thank a bunch, Susan.

Joseph May

Date: 5/2/2016 11:00:00 PM

Congrats on a fine win Lin

Lin Lane
Date: 5/7/2016 8:02:00 AM

Thank you, Joseph.

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/2/2016 9:43:00 PM

Hi Lin, I remember this beautiful poem of yours chosen as POTD, and I am so glad to see it high on the podium in this contest! Congratulations! Hugs, Sandra

Lin Lane
Date: 5/2/2016 10:58:00 PM

Thanks so very much, Sandra. I'm always delighted to read your kind compliments.

Lu Loo

Date: 5/2/2016 7:44:00 PM

Lin, a beautiful Fave..well done and congrats on your placement! Have a blessed night lady :)-luloo

Lin Lane
Date: 5/2/2016 10:57:00 PM

Thank you, Ma'am. I've just left a message for you on your placement...well done.

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/2/2016 7:14:00 PM

Congratulation my lovely friend on your beautiful win. Loved always, bl

Lin Lane
Date: 5/2/2016 10:56:00 PM

Thank you very much, BL. I'm always happy to read your comments.

Funom Makama

Date: 3/21/2016 11:49:00 AM

What an incredible sonnet! You should be one of the reasons a world sonnet day should exist. Beautiful! So beautiful

Lin Lane
Date: 3/21/2016 12:38:00 PM

You went way back for this one, Funom. Thank you for doing that and I'm really glad you like it so well.

William Smith

Date: 1/31/2016 8:21:00 AM

I enjoyed this read. Your rhyme is melodic and your meaning Devine. Thanks for writing this. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 1/31/2016 8:26:00 AM

Hello, Tom? William? whatever name(s) you choose, I'm delighted that you enjoyed reading this one. Thank you for your sweet comments ;)

Daniel Turner

Date: 1/14/2016 7:21:00 AM

"tis more honeyed thy lips when touching mine", very nice.Lin T.J.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/14/2016 7:30:00 AM

Thank you very much, Daniel...T.J?

Robert Lindley

Date: 1/12/2016 9:02:00 AM

Great sonnet, love the form and style. Fantastic choice for POTD, CONGRATS ON THIS WELL DESERVED RECOGNITION MY FRIEND! "Stirred to flame, I dost fail to disguise need in my loins ere want of fine pleasure." ^^^ O' how many times as a young man did I desire to utter those words to my lady love..

Lin Lane
Date: 1/13/2016 4:34:00 PM

Thank you very much, Robert ;)

Lionel Derbyshire

Date: 1/11/2016 1:02:00 AM

Rich with alluring honesty .. A joy to read

Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2016 4:13:00 AM

Hello, Lionel. Thank you so very much.

Michael Tor

Date: 1/11/2016 12:27:00 AM

Lin congratulations on being featured. A wonderful write.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/11/2016 4:12:00 AM

Thanks very much, Michael, for always making kind comments.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 1/10/2016 7:58:00 PM

Hi Lin, a most wonderful Sonnet indeed and a well deserved POTD for this Sonnet. So gentle, soft, dreamy, just flows from the start to the finish. This gets a seven Lin and it does join the other Sonnets in my faves....Vladislav.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/10/2016 8:22:00 PM

I really appreciate your kindest of compliments. Thank you very much, Vladislav.

Danetta Barney

Date: 1/10/2016 7:40:00 PM

Congratulations on your poem of the day! :)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/10/2016 7:56:00 PM

Thank you very much, Danetta.

Tim Smith

Date: 1/10/2016 6:07:00 PM

Very lovely poem Lin...Congrats on being featured today

Lin Lane
Date: 1/10/2016 6:09:00 PM

That comment jump happens to me too, Tim. Thanks for stopping by for a visit and for your nice comment ;)

Dean Mobley

Date: 1/10/2016 5:46:00 PM

My favorite

Lin Lane
Date: 1/10/2016 5:51:00 PM

Ahh, your favorite. That is quite a compliment! Thank you so very much, Dean.

Terrance Upham

Date: 1/10/2016 5:44:00 PM

Beautiful poem an congratulations from from Wicked Romancer Word's overshadoweding intellectual beauty's writing emotions in every word the economy of unique lines your efficiencies in every beautiful line congratulations.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/10/2016 5:50:00 PM

Hello, Terrance, and thank you much for so many compliments. I appreciate your words and visit.