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Moonlit Pond

sitting by the pond the water glimmers, shimmers like a silver light love’s eyes shine, grazing in mine - real, or a reflection too? 5/27/12 For Rick's "Let's Pass a Tanka Love Note" contest

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Joseph May

Date: 9/26/2012 9:16:00 AM

soup mail

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/17/2012 4:39:00 PM

Nice use ot that Asian form! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/16/2012 4:42:00 AM

Susan, stopping by to say good night...pd

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2012 7:40:00 PM

oh susan, on that one poem of mine about the tough girl. I would have fought her. I was super skinny in those days and not practiced in kick boxing but maybe I'd have kicked her butt off that hill with my strong lets. hahaha (one can only dream) Did you open "about this poem"? If you do that, you can copy and paste my links to the two early poems I wrote (narration) in which I tell the story of what finally happened between me and my rival Margo.

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 6/1/2012 10:57:00 PM

Wonderful! Last line haunts. Best wishes in the contest, dear! Hugs, Cyndi

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/1/2012 3:52:00 PM

lovely Tanka, good luck in contest.

Jack Horne

Date: 5/31/2012 1:24:00 PM

lovely tanka, Susan - love the clever last line

Kathryn Collins

Date: 5/30/2012 7:11:00 AM

Susan - beautiful end. I hope you did mean 'grazing' It fits. love, Kathy

Nathan D.

Date: 5/30/2012 5:42:00 AM

stop wasting your time on these useless forms that have little to no relevence i have seen glimpses of your talent and have come to expect more from you then just short poems filled with fascinating imagery. longer !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/29/2012 5:04:00 PM

Susan, on rereading this one: did you mean to say "grazing" I think you meant gazing. I came here to see if you had new poems. I guess not. If you see any of yours I never read,please let me know. Am betting Joe will be home any second and wondering what to make for dinner! thanks for all the cute comments today. Luv, Andrea

Joseph May

Date: 5/29/2012 7:52:00 AM

very nice Susan.. I love the last line..love's illusion glimmers..good luck in the contest..Love ..Joseph.

Lisa Cooper

Date: 5/28/2012 9:30:00 PM

great write!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/27/2012 6:47:00 PM

I love how you made this a "reflection" about love, Susan. Glad I saw it here today.

Joann Grisetti

Date: 5/27/2012 11:32:00 AM

Wlle done love poem.

Terry O'Leary

Date: 5/27/2012 11:24:00 AM

Very nice... Terry

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/27/2012 11:20:00 AM

Is it romance in the air......?....Lovely done this Tanka poem B.E.Susan. - Wish you luck in contest. - oxox Anne-Lise

David Williams

Date: 5/27/2012 11:01:00 AM

Susan looks real to me,..David

Richard Palmer

Date: 5/27/2012 10:39:00 AM

nice Black Eye

Debra Squyres

Date: 5/27/2012 10:38:00 AM

Good tanka....ahh the question, is it or is it not real?? Enjoyed !!

Russell Sivey

Date: 5/27/2012 9:55:00 AM

Wow, this is a powerful symbolic write my friend! I really enjoyed this wonderful poem that you have written so flawlessly! I love how you implied the fact that there is a moon present, I really liked that! This is an amazing write Susan! Great Work!!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/27/2012 9:49:00 AM

Good Morning Susan, from Maryland ;-) ooo WHo, are you passing this Tanka toooo... I like the fitful shimmering light, .. the silver imagery is very captivating. I wonder too about your ending romantic question... WHat ever it is! I like the feelings you compose with your Tanka,, good luck in Ricks, contest... PD