Moon

The dreamy lovers walk And gaze at Earth - A pretty marble ball. Their home since birth, This dreary lunar base, So lacking mirth. But, oh, imagine turf Or kissing by a firth. for Lisa's contest, 21st April

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 6/30/2013 3:10:00 PM

congrats on your win ;}

Audrey Haick

Date: 6/9/2013 9:59:00 PM

Always enjoy your writes, Jack! Another well deserved win! Congratulations, my friend. x Annalise

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 5/7/2013 1:03:00 PM

I enjoyed and admired this your clever write so much... Congrats on your win~A.O

Kathryn Collins

Date: 5/5/2013 7:29:00 AM

Jack - Soooooo original and fun to read. love, Kathy

Victoria Anderson-Throop

Date: 4/30/2013 2:51:00 AM

like 'dreary lunar base'...nice line

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/22/2013 2:51:00 PM

you came up with some interesting rhymes with earth!!very clever as always, my friend.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/21/2013 5:06:00 PM

Got a chuckle in this one..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for the visits..Sara

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/21/2013 5:02:00 PM

A charming write that catches the reader's attention with your enchanting imagery.. thanks for the welcome-back greeting... well done, my friend!..)

Russell Sivey

Date: 4/21/2013 4:11:00 PM

I have to admit, you go me to look up what a firth was, I never heard of that before, but it fits the poem very wondrously! Oh but what would life be like on the moon, would it be dreary?...I'd say it would be! This poem is perfect for the contest, I like the perspective that you brought with this piece! Such a fantastic poem, Great Work!!