Monochrome Memories

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The Verso-Rhyme is:

- a poem in 8 lines with a syllabic count of 6-4-6-4-6-4-6-4…

- it has a rhyme scheme , xaxbxaxb. ( x being unrhymed)…

- this is written without punctuation except an exclamation in the end...

As fragmented skies weep My night of gray Monochrome memories And cobblestone Dreams silently await The break of day when suddenly I hear The telephone! Written by Emile Aug. 19th , 2015 for “VISUAL OF A VERSO - Poetry Contest”

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Kp Nunez

Date: 8/20/2015 7:32:00 PM

Did the phone ring just when you were about the write the last line, hence the exclamation? Another awesome write, Emile. Kim :-)

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/21/2015 8:58:00 AM

Thanks Kim, I appreciate your comments and support. Emile.

Jack Horne

Date: 8/19/2015 2:44:00 PM

lovely write and a form I've never come across before (must try it)

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/19/2015 2:57:00 PM

Thanks Jack, I appreciate your support. Emile.

Anu Nayak

Date: 8/19/2015 1:03:00 PM

Dear Emile, wit of your soul seen in the brevity and beauty of this poem! waiting is on....for the someone special....too good...good luck for the contest...love, Anu:-) A 7!!

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/19/2015 2:58:00 PM

Thanks So much Anulaxmi, I appreciate your support. Emile.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/19/2015 11:05:00 AM

WOW! :) This is wonderful. Thanks for teaching me something new. I can see why that last line would need an exclamation mark. Good one, Emile. :)

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/19/2015 2:59:00 PM

Thanks Eileen, I appreciate your kind words of support. Emile.