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Mixing In the Moonlight

Mixing in the Moonlight Dear darling, gaze ye at the blood red moon. Ancient light that calls with its bright red tones. Fret not, on the breeze there will be no tune. For the loss is great, witness how she moans. How can we lowly sinners, give her hope? Her pain daunting, my love, that is so true. The poor boy hanged at the end of a rope. With our hidden love, it may next be you. Let us then escape ‘neath cover of dark. For to lose you would crush my very soul. Upon that tree, the beasts have left their mark. Where once his heart was, there is but a hole. They forbid two colours joining as one. The moonlight is far safer than the sun. My attempt at a sonnet.

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Date: 9/18/2023 1:25:00 PM
I liked your sonnet! The title was intriguing...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/18/2023 2:07:00 PM
Thanks Paige.
Date: 9/14/2023 4:40:00 PM
An excellent sonnet Richard, for your first attempt too, well done you… Belle
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/14/2023 5:11:00 PM
Much appreciated.
Date: 9/10/2023 2:52:00 AM
Goodness Richard- your first sonnet! What an amazing achievement. I think this form suits you well. Perfect pentameter and I love the use of archaic words. Think the Bard himself would be impressed with this one. I am! A great tragedy as you would expect from a sonnet. Wonderful ending couplet- especially that last line. I look forward to hopefully enjoying more from you!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/10/2023 3:47:00 PM
What a wonderful response to this piece. Much appreciated.
Date: 9/9/2023 8:57:00 AM
I like it, Richard. Good form, and very intriguing poetry, my friend. I hope you'll write more sonnets in the future. Bill
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/9/2023 10:50:00 AM
Much appreciated.
Date: 9/9/2023 8:10:00 AM
Your sonnet rhymes and flows very well..
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/9/2023 10:50:00 AM
Thanks, I was hoping I got it right.
Date: 9/8/2023 8:57:00 PM
Hello, Richard Lamoureux you have got it now - beginners luck - I'm not fond of sonnets - as you will see - I did like the read and imagery - well done - Good Luck, stay safe too!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2023 9:42:00 PM
Much appreciated. It’s good to try new things.
Date: 9/8/2023 6:44:00 PM
Forbidden Love,many times forbidden for no valid reasons...and the punishment it carried..In some countries it's still that way..How scary to live a life without the freedom to love who you want,to be with who you want..A great topic Rick..A tragic sonnet..I enjoyed.reading it.
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Tom Woody
Date: 9/9/2023 11:28:00 AM
:)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2023 7:55:00 PM
Your response is so eloquently expressed. Hugs Rick.
Date: 9/8/2023 12:30:00 PM
A very haunting and tragic story, and still too recent in history for comfort~
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2023 2:02:00 PM
Thanks for giving it a read.
Date: 9/8/2023 9:51:00 AM
Did you mintion a lynching? And the fears of the masters? Thank God we have a God.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2023 10:28:00 AM
Yes at one time it was very dangerous to be in an interracial relationship.

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