Mighty Waters

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For Chrystaline competition

Melting ice Drizzles, puddles, and flows Ever inexorably downwards. Rain clouds form, Giving of their essence, Contribute to what melted before. Trickling down, Forming puddles and streams; Then rivers, lakes, and tributaries. Suddenly, The river bed just ends, Enchanting the spectators below. Mark Halliday Some form Of Chrystaline contest 20141031

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Dan Helppi

Date: 10/31/2014 10:12:00 PM

You did this well, Your last line made me go off to places I did not expect, well done.

Mark J. Halliday
Date: 11/4/2014 6:29:00 PM

Thanks. Glad you liked it.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/31/2014 3:52:00 PM

Great description charting the journey from beginning to the end of the waterfall - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/31/2014 4:40:00 PM

I started my poem about 4 days ago and that's as far as I've got so far - ideas but nothing flowing yet:-( Hugs jan xxx

Mark J. Halliday
Date: 10/31/2014 4:36:00 PM

Thanks Jan. Couldn't come up with anything profoundly emotional about it, so just went to the origins.

Debra Squyres

Date: 10/31/2014 3:40:00 PM

I do like where you took this challenge from the source to the ending climax of the waterfall.... well done !!

Debra Squyres
Date: 10/31/2014 4:45:00 PM

As someone told me long ago... go with what moves you to write !! I think you did a fantastic job !!!

Mark J. Halliday
Date: 10/31/2014 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Debra. Couldn't come up with anything profoundly emotional about it, so just went to the origins.