Midnight

Stray thoughts torture my mind... Swirling, twirling as I gaze out the dark window into the Starless night... I shudder and tremble as I am immobile by fright... My eyes deceive me as they play tricks... A wall of pitch black carpets the sky... I am transfixed by the sight... Caught up in the plight... I shudder and tremble as I am immobile by fright... I am inundated by the sorrowful song it sings... Winds blow and flow, pulling me deeper in... I shudder and tremble...as I am immobile by fright... For the contest: Not your average Ballade.

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Shane Cooper

Date: 12/22/2014 10:59:00 PM

Hi Meg, I have read in the darkness already and did enjoy it, a very well crafted poem. Thank you.

Meg Anderson
Date: 12/22/2014 11:09:00 PM

Well good. It is one of my favorites. Thank you four reading! I love the feedback.

Shane Cooper

Date: 12/22/2014 8:39:00 PM

A wonderful poem.The imagery you have used is forceful and strengthened by the repition of the line "I shudder...." which brings an overarching darkness to the piece. thank you.

Meg Anderson
Date: 12/22/2014 10:45:00 PM

Oh if you this one so much check out my poem: In the darkness. Thanks. Meg

Meg Anderson
Date: 12/22/2014 10:43:00 PM

Shane, thank you for reading my work! Yes this one is inspired by shadows you see outside ones window. It was late at night and these thoughts caught me off guard and I had to write them down. I do like to repeat lines. Meg

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/5/2014 9:12:00 PM

Dark, deep, moving, beautiful poem!

Meg Anderson
Date: 12/5/2014 9:41:00 PM

Arthur, thank you for taking the time to read my poems it means a lot. I love the feedback. Meg