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Message From Another World

My fellow captives remained in a coma. In pink-dusk hours sparse plants were dying. Parched earth found ‘neath a scarlet sun going nova, sinking as blood-red clouds were crying. The sinking sun stood as a warning; glowing dim on a civilization. Neath this sunset sights were alarming -- neglecting nature caused devastation Through technology they monitored us, inhabitants of this soon-doomed world. "See our dying sun,” they said, “be cautious; you have time to act, but our hopes unfurled.” Their rotation around this fading star, now cast a crimson glow on stark sand. Treating me kindly, being from afar, they asked me to protect the bounty of Earth's land. Their star now set, they pointed to a sun, twinkling bright in a distant galaxy. Beaming with hope, I knew it was the one that blessed Earth with life for you and me. Waking in my bed, I recalled their sundown, and a mission I now embarked upon. “Take care, our planet will keep spinning ‘round; nature’s harmony we must focus on.” *Entry for Paula’s “Not Just Any Sunset” contest

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Date: 8/23/2011 1:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in Paula's "Not Just Any Sunset" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/21/2011 10:00:00 AM
Congratulation for winning in contest. bl
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Date: 8/21/2011 4:27:00 AM
Many congratulations to you Carolyn. X
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Date: 8/20/2011 5:16:00 PM
green, green, go green, Carolyn. Way to go . Great message with contest for a vehicle! Congratulations Luv
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Date: 8/20/2011 4:00:00 PM
hey Carolyn congrats on your win Dave
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Date: 8/20/2011 3:56:00 PM
Carolyn: Congratulations on your win in the Not Just Any Sunset...contest sponsored by Paula Swanson. Very challenging! Caryl Ramsdale
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Date: 8/14/2011 4:33:00 PM
A most worthwhile write Carolyn, and i wish you all success in paulas contest..
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Date: 8/11/2011 11:45:00 AM
Such a special message Carolyn, enjoyed your lovely poem with its special message.
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Date: 8/10/2011 9:08:00 PM
Very nice imagery here Carolyn...best wishes for the contest.SOUPMAIL.
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Date: 8/10/2011 4:27:00 PM
Wow....you have taken this contest, and made an amazing story!! Well done Carolyn....a wonderful imagination. And ps...thank you once again, for your kindness, and for placing my poem in your contest! I am honored and grateful, and also for the chance to edit! Thank you!
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Date: 8/10/2011 11:54:00 AM
Amazingly beautiful & brilliantly creative. You have taken us on wonderful journey my friend which can be a starting of a new story with all the charms of your creative & beautiful writing. Great write beyond doubt. My good wishes for your contest entry & for your future story. Thanks for your kind comments on my Poem. Due to some eye problem I am not reading and writing much and have missed many of your wonderful Poems. Hope to see more of them soon. Love & best wishes always Ravindra.Carolyn
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Date: 8/10/2011 7:43:00 AM
Good luck in Paula's contest with this sunset work..Very unusual..Thanks for stopping by...Sara
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Date: 8/10/2011 7:16:00 AM
You managed to pull this one out of the comsos talented lady! Top notch in imagination AND reality!This is more than a poem with wonderful imagery and message, it's a great book in the making, Carolyn. Kudos to you. Love it
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Date: 8/10/2011 6:21:00 AM
Awesome imagery caught with pen!!!!! Really enjoyed reading your poem! Thank You for your kind comments I appreciate it!!---Lori
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Date: 8/9/2011 10:25:00 PM
Thanks for your kind comments on my poem Bartered Quill. I agree with your thesis to conserve is to preserve. Your use of descriptive adjectives gives this poem luster, shine.
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Date: 8/9/2011 5:56:00 PM
Now, this is the kind of write which seperates you dear poet ! You mezmerise me with these captivating words, and give, i'm certain, your fans of these writes, much to ponder ! Great write dear Carolyn ! Have a wonderful week my dear friend ! Much love, james
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Date: 8/9/2011 3:16:00 PM
This is amazing, my friend. Surely a big winner. Thought I'd try posting comments one last time for today...
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Date: 8/9/2011 1:50:00 PM
Carolyn, your verse points out so many sad truths in an amazing way. We all see what is happening and don't know what to do till too late. Wonderful verse you wrote.
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Date: 8/9/2011 1:20:00 PM
Just a quick note to let you know I was here and got to read this very creative write by you. I will be back again soon to read more if the Soup is up and running Carolyn. Have a wonderful day what is left of it. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/9/2011 7:28:00 AM
Perhaps the words they come to you, in dark of night i get them too, and often when awake, come pouring out, from lava's quake, keep em coming,blue, as you are intended too...
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Date: 8/9/2011 1:10:00 AM
I have been away forever and u are my first read! A science fiction poem with a conservation twist..I would expect nothing less from someone who loves the earth as much as you. The ending is so lovely! Nature's harmony we must focus on. Hope this finds u well, Carolyn
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Date: 8/8/2011 11:58:00 PM
Good entry for the contest, Carolyn. Quite creative and I think Paula will really enjoy it! thanks for the comment on my blog. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/8/2011 6:31:00 PM
this was awesome good luck in the contest. cory
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Date: 8/8/2011 6:07:00 PM
I love the way you painted images so nicely with your pen ... great take I agree on the contest... hope you are doing well and are resting....love Michael
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Date: 8/8/2011 5:56:00 PM
a visit from aliens i like a lot excellent imagination (or is it), we are not alone, top write. steven
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