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***Kiss me quiet is a phrase coined by J.A. Fraser and since I heard and read from him it inspired me to write something about it.. :)! and so this is it.. :)!

MERGED IN SURRENDER Kiss me quiet under the rain~ skips and pounds, awash the tears and pain fevering my anguish, with the July moon to stir my slothful frown, wide-skirted trees swing demure on the breeze their cyclic sops and bows-- a dancing clown. Our hands clasp to spins and turns on that wet ground, tango to loves groove, we are pleased to tease as this emblaze our spirit and behold our strength. The air touched by purple lilac blossoms caress-- it velvety flirt tickling our pact distress. Our hungered bodies beseech on nightly bounds in a ballroom beseem for loving grounds. From lips tiptoeing on skin, so easy they appease, to strokes flavoured by glows of summer reprise, slow to fast moves wings a-twitter heated degrees as this emblaze our spirit and behold our strength. Among the years where there's whispers that seize, experience match our heartbeats on impermeable squeeze and if tension snaps on daylight and nightfall sound in search of essences where rubbles or debris abounds... In the absence of solution, should we stop to care? Ah! Let crisp leaves of autumn display our memories, cherish the days when February sings Spring: our promise as this emblaze our spirit and behold our strength. Hearken thoughts and hearts merged in surrender, the shaped images and forms impress the depths, our love root a seed echoing the song of forever as this emblaze our spirit and behold our strength. __________________________________________________ ***The first three stanza didn't follow definite rhyme format but the rhymes are retained as much as possible on each stanza except the last one, the envoy is rhymed with. Sponsor Catie Lindsey Contest Name Not Your Average Ballade Placed 7th... O.E. Guillermo 9:53 pm. April 21, 2015

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Jan Allison

Date: 5/14/2015 1:21:00 PM

dropping back with my congratulations Olive - you should be so proud of all you have achieved in your poetry journey - i know many others are so proud of you:-) Hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 5/14/2015 11:46:00 AM

Loved your poetry Olive! I call it a 13 to 1 Hit! Ya got 13 Raves verses 1 complainer! Tis said, "You can't be great all the time" but we think you are! Cheers!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/14/2015 1:19:00 PM

I agree with you Judy but the 13 positive comments make up for the one knocker:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/9/2015 8:36:00 PM

you are an awesome poet Olive...., Congratulations ~LINDA~

Robert Lindley

Date: 5/9/2015 7:12:00 PM

Congrats on this fine poem and your win! Found it to be smooth, deep and very , very creative! A7

Skat A

Date: 5/9/2015 5:55:00 PM

Olive, congratulations LOVE SKAT :)

Rob Carmack

Date: 5/9/2015 2:21:00 PM

Congrats Anime. I especially love the third stanza.

Carl Halling

Date: 5/9/2015 12:09:00 PM

This is Romantic with a capital "R", Olive Eloisa, a truly gorgeous poem.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 5/28/2015 8:39:00 AM

thank you so much Carl.. :)!

Milton Robertson

Date: 4/23/2015 1:30:00 PM

It sounds like love. A Beautiful Thing and this is very good.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/24/2015 10:13:00 AM

thank you so much for dropping by.. :)!

Emile Pinet

Date: 4/22/2015 2:48:00 PM

Your poem falls within the category of romantic, fanciful and imaginative; armed with an energy of its own that propels love into our sphere of reality. Emile.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/23/2015 8:35:00 AM

Thank you so much Emile.. :)!! generous comment and a booster!!.. :)!~olive eloisa

Julia Ward

Date: 4/22/2015 1:13:00 AM

The message got lost under the finery, as Nandita told you. (My comments are how I want them to be, not how you want them, Olive.)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 10:04:00 AM

thank you Julia for dropping by and leaving a comment.. :)! a nice way to be better.. :)!!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 10:03:00 AM

the 3rd stanza: tells how memories (they created through years together) even found from rubbles and debris can help to lift their spirits and strengthen their bond, and the last telling that through it all they are singing song of forever because they are bound and rooted in love.. :)!!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 10:00:00 AM

rains here includes rain as in rain, and problems too that cause pain, the 2nd stanza to present how lil touches or to the ultimate expression of physical love fortifies couples.. :)!! I just give a lil background.. :)!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 9:57:00 AM

Its fine Julia, like what I said, I meant the imagery to solidify the message of merging... :) the first stanza: I add nature forces this I include to elaborate that no rains shall crumble them and so even the their surroundings will join them.. :)!!!

Nandita Das

Date: 4/21/2015 10:01:00 PM

The message gets submerged under so much beauty. Well penned beauty...beautiful poetry. #7

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 10:14:00 AM

thank you so much.. :)!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/21/2015 3:05:00 PM

Ahh!!! Romantic..Enjoyed reading this one..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 10:11:00 AM

thank you Sara. :)! God bless.. :)!

M. L. Kiser

Date: 4/21/2015 2:20:00 PM

There's some dynamic imagery in this piece of poetry. It's easy to visualize the two, totally merged.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 10:10:00 AM

thanks much MLK you nailed what I want the reader to perceived.. :)!

James Fraser

Date: 4/21/2015 12:58:00 PM

Line to line, stanza to stanza, the readers taken on a beautiful journey of romantic imagery little one. I'll never tire of your writing, and this poem shows why, it's wonderful Oliz, huggles//Dino James xxxx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 10:08:00 AM

Huge James, Yes, I need to portray the image well.. :)!! isn't it one of my poems you read says: Painting in poetry.. so Im trying to do it.. :)!!!! they said it's more effective that way.. :)! but i hope the message of being so in love is still there.. :)!! hugs back//olive eloisa

Jan Allison

Date: 4/21/2015 11:55:00 AM

such wonderful sensual imagery Olive - a delightful write my friend - the final stanza is so so romantic:-) Hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/22/2015 10:09:00 AM

it must be Jan.. :)!! that is my aim to say and picture this poem romantic and lovable.. :)! hugs back!//olive eloisa

Julia Ward

Date: 4/21/2015 10:21:00 AM

Evocative imagery. I particularly like "wide-skirted trees". Julia, :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/21/2015 6:30:00 PM

thank you Julia for your comment.. :)! but i hope aside from the imagery the message will be much seen... the imagery is needed to solodify the message.. :)!