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For Tommy Woody's - Gotta love alliterations poetry contest..

This one was a battle between too many alliterations and being romantic..

 

In my hunger, I saw a hallucination of heaven. From afar, visions of a golden glow, lustered, lingering above a crowded crossroad. This aura of agave aromatherapy, left an amorous aroma of romantic ruminations, so I became a devotee, desiring her divinity. But, such was her evanescent existence, those effervescent eyes now seem ephemeral. Adrift in the angst of absence, I feel the lament of an autumn leaf, yearning to be evergreen, clinging to your stalk. Or to sharpen and shape like a tenacious thorn, honouring your rosso corsa, roseate radiance. If I was a polyamorous poet, my abundance of adjectives and alliterations, would be disloyal like daylight, so my vibrant vocabulary vows to allegorise you in my anthology of analogies. My mellifluous muse, I care not if your verses are vintage or virginal, as you are my most memorable metaphor - the assonance to compliment my consonance. In your majestic moonlight, I'm fluorescent, portraying a perpendicular penumbra, craving for you like a citrine crescent hoping to become complete. I'm a bard with a baritone ballad, blossoming words like spring sepals, into a boundless bouquet for my beloved, so remove the veil behind your verbs and reveal your velvet vermilion lips once more. There is an alluring art to an aubade. In an aureolin and amethyst aurora, our lantern of love will forever scintillate, serenading in smooth and soothing susurrus sounds, soaring in a serene sapphire sky, ascending like a saffron sunrise sonata and if cumbersome clouds, colour horizons in charcoal, delicately descend, pouring in holy drops, soaking my soul like spilling ink on unblemished ivory fibers.

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Date: 5/25/2024 1:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your win SO! alliteration is off the charts, I used to love James Blunt's "Your Beautiful" as well. "our lantern of love will forever scintillate, serenading in smooth and soothing susurrus sounds, soaring in a serene sapphire sky, ascending like a saffron sunrise sonata" favorite lines! xhugs
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Date: 5/25/2024 10:25:00 AM
Wow I am blown away with your diction, flow, and passion and devotion displayed in your verses... marvellous! Very well deserved win brother! Congratulations!
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Date: 5/25/2024 9:27:00 AM
Congratulations dear Silent.
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Date: 5/25/2024 9:26:00 AM
I love this "baritone ballad", S O. You and your "mellifluous muse" have a very good thing going. And BOL in the contest.
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Date: 5/25/2024 6:10:00 AM
What you do best, on full display. What's not to love here? You are my assonance to compliment my consonance... Cool line. A bard with a baritone ballad... So many good lines. Congrats on placement
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Date: 5/24/2024 12:21:00 AM
Bravo. You, my dear friend, are truly the King of Alliteration. You've got to admit it yourself: This is truly one of your best Alliteration poems. I see a Winner in lights; however, good luck in the contest. It's top of my list of fave songs, too. Perfect choice...Hugs
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Maria Williams
Date: 5/27/2024 4:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your second placement...Hugs
Date: 5/23/2024 7:21:00 PM
Lovely paired alliterations Silent one. "would be disloyal like daylight, so my vibrant vocabulary vows to allegorise you in my anthology of analogies". lines are so romantic and promising. I always give you your crown. Great piece.
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Date: 5/22/2024 4:45:00 PM
SO, it's a beautiful allegorization of love and the descriptions and alliteration weave together a very strong sense of emotion. It's really amazing how our feelings of attraction to another can be this strong. The video reflected those feelings. It was cute how he was undressing and I was wondering how far that would go. My goodness, that was dramatic!
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Date: 5/22/2024 1:17:00 PM
The whole poem conveyed really deep meanings, shaded by your deep metaphors, powerful, eloquent, an enjoyable read
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Date: 5/22/2024 8:13:00 AM
A great read Silent, Good luck with the contest.
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Date: 5/22/2024 5:00:00 AM
A remarkable poem my friend. Best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 5/22/2024 4:02:00 AM
Your poetic prowess on display, SO---in splendid alliteration woven with your theme romantic.--I'm a bard with a baritone ballad, blossoming words like spring sepals, into a boundless bouquet for my beloved---excellent as always.
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Date: 5/22/2024 2:07:00 AM
What a great poem: perfect diction, stupendous alliteration, great vision.
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Date: 5/21/2024 7:40:00 PM
Absolutely brilliant, otherworldly, magical! A clear fav
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Date: 5/21/2024 4:41:00 PM
Well, I dub you King of Alliteration. Outstanding job. You've created a fabulous contest entry. Best wishes with the contest, Sara
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Tom Woody
Date: 5/24/2024 5:48:00 PM
Ack! I lost my crown in less than a month!
Date: 5/21/2024 4:36:00 PM
I hadn't read the top part but as I read your poem, I was imagining easily this was meant for Tommy Boy's contest. You sealed the deal!
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Date: 5/21/2024 2:36:00 PM
Beautifully penned Silent
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Date: 5/21/2024 1:43:00 PM
Wow, you are a master of Alliteration. Mind-blowing. If only I had 1/2 your talent, I'd feel I had accomplished something worthwhile in life. Absolutely amazing.
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Date: 5/21/2024 1:36:00 PM
Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your creativity with us. Sara K
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Date: 5/21/2024 12:44:00 PM
I am really at a loss to compliment your piece Silent One! Your muse has more than bestowed you with blossoming words in a boundless bouquet! Your endless fountain of phrases fascinates me, as always!!! Awesome!!!
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Date: 5/21/2024 12:25:00 PM
Dear SO, I am impressed by the remarkable display of creative genius in this poem, which effectively employs outstanding metaphors, imagery, and alliterations. The writing's gentle and comforting nature enhances the examination of love and its related emotions, adding complexity. The distinctive vocabulary and compelling cadence of the text engender a remarkable reading encounter, characterized by an especially potent introduction and conclusion that resonate profoundly with the reader.
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Date: 5/21/2024 9:40:00 AM
Wonderful Alliteration running through this poem Silent One, simply beautiful writing… Beryl
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Date: 5/21/2024 9:40:00 AM
Dear silent one, this poem is not just brilliant poetically with excellent metaphors and imagery as well as exquisite alliterations, but it has a softness to it that really is so soothing when reading it. Youv not just expressee what love is and feels like but also so many other emotions entwined with love! Your use of words throughout is unique and really catchy! Captivating rhythm and flow of lines! I really love how youv especially started the poem and also how youv ended it, leaving an everlasting impression so soulfully moving! I found the lines-
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Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2024 9:49:00 AM
Best wishes once again for the contest and i think tomsz will also appreciate the seamless flow of this! As it doesn’t feel forced! Your alliterations seem fitting for every line! Pleasure reading your passionate poem ! Touched my heart once again! But not surprising as you always write romantic ruminations so effortlessly
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Date: 5/21/2024 9:47:00 AM
“ I'm a bard with a baritone ballad, blossoming words like spring sepals, into a boundless bouquet for my beloved, so remove the veil behind your verbs and reveal your velvet vermilion lips once more.” Awwn those lines! Really made me smile! Only a bard like silent one can assure and convince their belovee to reveal their velvet lips once more! The ephemeral nature of love and having their love experienced can be felt in so many lines in this poem! And it makes me feel like we should learn to appreciate time! And love! When it arrives and touches beyond skin and heart! The cosmic connection that unfolds from your amethyst auroras woven and painted so eloquently! Is so deep! The depth and delicate nature of this poem made me think, if this does not score high in the contest, i am not sure what would! Youve made my take look so amateur! This is poetic brilliance!
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Date: 5/21/2024 9:44:00 AM
“ I became a devotee, desiring her divinity.” what a way to depict devotion for your beloved and the alliterations in that line really blew me away! “ I feel the lament of an autumn leaf, yearning to be evergreen, clinging to your stalk. Or to sharpen and shape like a tenacious thorn, honouring your rosso corsa, roseate radiance.” Wow! I am just speechless! Reading the way youv shown through words how you feel beyond what your beloved shows! Her inner emotions too! Such an empathetic touch those lines did deliver! “ If I was a polyamorous poet, my abundance of adjectives and alliterations, would be disloyal like daylight, so my vibrant vocabulary vows to allegorise you in my anthology of analogies.” This left me breathless! Disloyal like daylight! I dont know how you come up with such similes and metaphors that really is so touching and. Meaningful!
Date: 5/21/2024 8:37:00 AM
What wondrous imagery! Great alliteration filled with romance and living color! Awesome, Silent!
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