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Late one night I found myself caught in the moon's gravitational pull on my heart. Oh what a weak human, once was I To be lured by the moon up in the sky. I thought of myself as a tranquil ocean, And he the moon, worthy of devotion. But each time he faltered; when he slipped, My world grew dark as in a lunar eclipse. Sad but true, the moon ruled my waves. Even when I knew he had misbehaved. Full moon, crescent, or even at quarter, He disturbed the surface of my still waters. He stirred my waves to a state of agitation. No sorrow or regret for his aggravation. He dared to live high among the stars. This moon's anger rivaled that of Mars. I knew he'd never make things right. So I turned my back upon his light. No longer tousled by violent storms, Within my ocean there's only calm. No more angry words can he bark The moon grew silent when he grew dark. An ocean's waves hold a salty brine So were the whitecaps held on mine. No more salty tears for him do I cry For the moon has fallen from my sky. His gravitational pull has no power To ever make me tremble or cower. My tides are balanced in ebb and flow Because of the seeds I learned to sow. There's an ocean of faith inside of me. Without the moon, I'm a tranquil sea.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 2/3/2020 12:47:00 PM
Superb. fave-ing.
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Date: 11/5/2015 1:58:00 PM
Great write Lin, wonderful analogy.
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Date: 11/5/2015 2:08:00 PM
Merci, I appreciate your reading it.
Date: 11/5/2015 12:18:00 PM
Your descriptive wording and great imagery brought this peom to life. Your poem uses unusual and imaginative subject matter to make a statement, and is clever in its use. Emile.
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Date: 11/5/2015 12:27:00 PM
It's so encouraging to receive such praise from you, Emile. Thank you very much~~
Date: 11/5/2015 7:53:00 AM
Excellent write... Love it!
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Date: 11/5/2015 11:20:00 AM
Thank you so much, Rahy,
Date: 11/5/2015 6:48:00 AM
Beyond excellent, a 7 for this superb write!
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Date: 11/5/2015 6:55:00 AM
your comments are most welcome...Thank you for being so generous.
Date: 11/5/2015 5:46:00 AM
this is captivating LL. nice one.
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Date: 11/5/2015 6:15:00 AM
Thank you, James.

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