Malachite Eyes

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Thick lashes fluttered over alluring eyes followed by a scant hint of a flirty smile "Come," said the look without disguise Come and love me if only for a while. Signals sent, he bowed and kissed her hand they danced in rhythm through the night. Near dawn, when the world sleeps in peace he looked for another signal, a green light. Malachite eyes told him what he wanted to know they walked back home, more in love than before. On their next date night she'd make the first move In this romantic game they play, no one keeps score.

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/1/2016 2:33:00 AM

So cool! I adore the imagination of those "malachite eyes that gave the green light" ... I once knew someone with amber eyes, and I felt it was a signal for me to slow down (kidding!). A lovely poem, Lin. Your last line sounds like my kind of game...

Lin Lane
Date: 3/1/2016 3:10:00 AM

Amber eyes - eyes of a tiger or tigress. It would be hard to slow down with either of those. Love your sense of humor, Tim. Thanks for liking this one.

Amy Guy

Date: 2/28/2016 3:40:00 AM

Malachite because they are envious?

Lin Lane
Date: 2/28/2016 5:26:00 AM

No, because they are green. There is nothing in any of those lines to suggest she's envious of anything. We should be envious of her...don't you think?

Winged Warrior

Date: 2/27/2016 6:05:00 PM

A green pearl of a write...as always...with admiration...^WW^

Lin Lane
Date: 2/27/2016 6:13:00 PM

Thank you kindly, sir.

Charlie Smith

Date: 2/27/2016 3:23:00 PM

An almost steamy good write...I enjoyed the DATE, Charlie

Lin Lane
Date: 2/27/2016 3:25:00 PM

lol ~ You thought she was being naughty ~ purrfect. Thanks for liking this one, Charlie.