Mad Dream

Driving along in my automobile I looked up there was no wheel Foot on the brakes turned to cornflakes Found my self in the gym having a swim Then I was doing weights I called the instructor to put more on There are no more mussels galore Alarm went off with smile on my face Another day in the rat race

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Jerry T Curtis

Date: 3/21/2018 7:35:00 PM

I hate days like that ! I've had cornflake brakes before, nice write

Niall Fulham
Date: 3/22/2018 2:22:00 AM

Hi Jerry , thank you for comment ::)))))~~~Niall

Akkina Downing

Date: 3/20/2018 9:51:00 PM

Lol! Super funny :)

Niall Fulham
Date: 3/21/2018 11:35:00 AM

Hi Akkina , lol 'There are no more weights' :::)))))) hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/20/2018 3:31:00 PM

- A chaotic dream, Niall - I guess you were exhausted when you woke up :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Niall Fulham
Date: 3/20/2018 3:44:00 PM

Hi Anne-Lise ,,thanks for comment ;) lol to much ice cream going to bed :::))) hugs~ Niall

Amy Sell

Date: 3/20/2018 11:44:00 AM

There's more between the lines of this than in the lines alone, and I mean that as a sincere compliment to your writing.

Niall Fulham
Date: 3/20/2018 3:04:00 PM

Hi Amy, thank you for comment my friend , your a clever girl ;) :::)))) Hugs~ Niall

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/19/2018 9:53:00 PM

A fun read, Niall.

Niall Fulham
Date: 3/20/2018 3:02:00 PM

Hi Line , thank you for comment my friend ::))) hugs ~Niall

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/19/2018 7:44:00 PM

A fun and clever poem Niall of the silly randomness of your dream's imagery - which I love by the way!! A wonderful write! Warmest wishes my friend :))

Niall Fulham
Date: 3/20/2018 12:54:00 PM

Hi Susan , thank you for comment my friend , lol they are the kind of dream I have so funny ::))) hugs ~ Niall

James Edward Lee Sr.

Date: 3/19/2018 7:26:00 PM

niall Love this very clever verse so funny James :)

Niall Fulham
Date: 3/20/2018 12:53:00 PM

Hi James , thank you for comment my friend ::)))~ Niall

Jan Allison

Date: 3/19/2018 2:51:00 PM

wow what funny imagery Niall glad its just a dream especially the cornflakes lol - maybe you were dreaming of breakfast:-) hugs jan xx

Niall Fulham
Date: 3/19/2018 3:06:00 PM

Hi Jan , lol , I take Porridge in the morning but cornflakes rhymes with brakes ,,hehehehehehe ::::))))))lol :)) hugs