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Luna Twirls

Hammock of moon drifting like swan to cradle night in brushed cyan While tinsels spark on glazed lagoon Drifting like swan... hammock of moon. Luna twirls from rush of wind’s scent As jasmines rise with flamed intent, Enthralling my eyes as blooms unfurl In rush of wind’s scent Luna twirls. Starlight joins with glitters of dust, On ripples daring to combust... The passion in my bones, dethroned From glitters of dust, starlight joins! Swap Quatrains. Let's See What You've Got! Contest of Andrea Dietrich *Listed as Quatrain Form

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Leon Enriquez

Date: 3/17/2014 9:24:00 PM

Dear Nette: Such lovely twirls in swirling swirls; a telling world where all thoughts curl! Leon

Kelly Deschler

Date: 3/11/2014 5:32:00 PM

I very much enjoyed reading this wonderful poem once again. An enchanting write, Nette! Congratulations on your win, as well!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. :)

Joseph May

Date: 3/9/2014 12:43:00 PM

Lovely write Nette...congrats on the win

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/9/2014 11:35:00 AM

Nette, I loved your entry. It is one of the very best for imagery. wish you had rhymed the last two lines better! this would have been in my top three. congrats on your win and Soupmail for you.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/9/2014 10:18:00 AM

Lovely! Congrats on your win Nette.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 3/9/2014 6:02:00 AM

Your pen dances across the paper like the moon in the sky. Fantastic!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/9/2014 5:03:00 AM

Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, nette

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 3/9/2014 1:32:00 AM

A great work you did here , congrats Nette.

Juliet Ligon

Date: 3/7/2014 1:56:00 PM

Your style is so dreamy, Nette. Always so beautiful!

Kelly Deschler

Date: 3/6/2014 4:17:00 PM

I was just drawn into this enchanting poem, and I became lost in your dreamy words and imagery! This is such a beautiful write, Nette! Good luck in the contest!...Thank you so much for the kind birthday wishes! :)

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 3/5/2014 9:25:00 AM

What a great poem Nette. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.... Lucilla

Darren Watson

Date: 3/5/2014 7:15:00 AM

Soup certainly found a lucky star on the day you joined . Superb poem nette , good luck.

Manny Paras

Date: 3/5/2014 6:30:00 AM

Terrific! I want to be exactly where you are at, cradling evening with such passion!

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/4/2014 10:35:00 PM

I just love it when I see your head up in the heavens whenever you write these magnificent writes my friend! I see you got your muse going...the night with the moon and the stars...your favorite! I thoroughly loved reading these incredible poems whenever you write them! What a grandiose piece, Great Work!!

Tim Ryerson

Date: 3/4/2014 5:20:00 PM

Ah yes, another gem about the moon I see...Are you sure you weren't a stow-away on Apollo 11? IF I live long enough and am filthy rich by then, I would love to be a passenger on one of the trips there...THAT would be a dream come true for sure...

Paul Callus

Date: 3/4/2014 1:53:00 PM

Enchanting choice of words...lovely. Good luck for the contest. // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/4/2014 12:59:00 PM

Your writes are always full of celestial images that sparkle and shine.... :-)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/4/2014 12:21:00 PM

- This is so beautiful, Nette !!! (I had to share it with my my best friend) - Good luck in the contest!! - Have a nice evening. - oxox // Anne-Lise (not new poem today)

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 3/4/2014 11:00:00 AM

Yep,this is another win with astrological colouration,you've done the swap very well,I hope this will find the judge(s)' attention as it has arrested my.I like this Nette.Great work.Thank you for your visit to my page.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/4/2014 8:35:00 AM

Reads like a winner to me..Enjoyed reading this one today..Sara