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Love Writhes On the Blues

Smokey air, husky wisps burn The tunes of a sax, And madness etches its velvet path This urge to rap, to boom, to reel Out of skin... Climbing unto your heat, a lover’s appeal Notes tracing hips and curves Into your arms , I swerve. Our bodies writhe on blues Grinding on café floors, Till cool refrains tilt a pitch My heart begins to drawl... Oh Latin strains urges a moan, A moan pulsing a fire While we burst in sweet desire. Turn me loose while rhythms arise We are fools, On this ragtime magic When magic wets moist lips; With a tempo flaming eyes Just this one night... Before last timbre of song burns As I wait for your long return.
Craig Cornish’s More Song Lyrics Contest by nette onclaud

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 9/12/2014 6:53:00 AM
wow ..very passionate ..love yur poems :)
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Date: 9/3/2014 11:04:00 AM
vibrant visual poetry, with a wonderful beat a sure hit, without the beat still a hit,,,love this nette, congrats
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Date: 9/3/2014 5:05:00 AM
- A beautiful poem .... as always !!! - (Better late than never ....) - Congratulations on your win - Have a beautiful day my friend, Nette - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/2/2014 3:53:00 PM
Wow, you took this to a whole new, wonderful and sexy plateau!!! Wonderful poem to this music, dear Nette!!
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Date: 9/2/2014 5:26:00 AM
Congrats on the win with this nice song, nette
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Date: 9/1/2014 11:58:00 PM
And back again wid huge congrats Nette on this winning awesome song!
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Date: 9/1/2014 11:28:00 PM
This is very beautiful Nette. I loved it. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla
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Date: 9/1/2014 7:43:00 PM
Congratulations, Nette! A very passionate write and a well-deserved win. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/1/2014 5:34:00 PM
very beautifully painted piece
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Date: 9/1/2014 4:05:00 PM
Congrats. I see you got some congrats down here and I am seeing Craig's remark, which probably means he is looking for the rhythmic aspect of it? He is so right about the uniqueness of your poem. It is very imaginative and sexy.
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Date: 9/1/2014 2:21:00 PM
Congratulations Nette. Well written. Beautiful
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Date: 9/1/2014 2:16:00 PM
congratulations. i knew this would win.
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Date: 9/1/2014 1:41:00 PM
Hmmm!How romantic..Lovely piece,Nette..Congrats on your superb win,dear friend...
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Date: 9/1/2014 10:17:00 AM
Sensually dancing to the blues in centre stage while everything else fades into the background. Your ending, as usual, captivating! gl in contest. // paul
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Date: 9/1/2014 9:38:00 AM
gorgeous imagery of loving feeling that wrap around the reader bringing a warming glow Nette. You have excelled hugs
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Date: 9/1/2014 9:05:00 AM
Really sensual, it captures the reader
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Date: 9/1/2014 8:14:00 AM
Very sweet song Nette! Amazing pen u hv, good luck dear!
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Date: 9/1/2014 7:49:00 AM
Jazzy love-- who could lose with that? I like the twist in the end. Nette, you are a song!
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Date: 9/1/2014 6:43:00 AM
excellent. I can't see this not winning. I loved reading this piece. thank you.
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Date: 9/1/2014 1:08:00 AM
THIS is....so creatively HOT! :) Writhing....always a good thing. Lovely, Nette. Good luck in the contest, my dear.
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