Love Vortex

love bleeds into me and now becomes life Light fractures into rainbow’s not hate Warm rises from my lonely black Rain summers life from past cold Old tear filled eyes now dry Soft dreams make me young Single was hard Two now pair We’re one Love ” spiraling effect” of vortex by antonyms in following line

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Jannie Breedt

Date: 12/28/2016 11:30:00 PM

Excêllent! Its like the Venturi effect and very alluring. Apparently when you drain yor bathh for instance the whirl turns clockwise and anti-clockwise in the Southern hemisphere are visa versa and I have absolutely no idea why I am telling you this Jannie

Just James
Date: 12/29/2016 12:06:00 AM

Thanks Jannie...its only seen with air flow as Coriolis force so weak it hardly affects water flow...:)

Adeniji Toluwalope Gideon

Date: 12/22/2016 1:14:00 PM

Beautiful! Absolutely incredible! I have learnt a lot from your poem James. Thank you for sharing. Much love, Adeniji

Just James
Date: 12/22/2016 11:49:00 PM

Thank you so much Adeniji! And thank you for the visit.

Jean Murray

Date: 12/15/2016 5:53:00 PM

Just the most romantic piece. Or two pieces...becoming one. Beautiful James.

Just James
Date: 12/19/2016 1:46:00 PM

Thank you so much Jean!

Jan Allison

Date: 12/15/2016 2:00:00 AM

WOW James my head's in a whirl - I have never seen this style before I love the opposing words on allternating lines :-) how creative my friend:-) hugs jan xx

Just James
Date: 12/15/2016 1:25:00 PM

Thank you so much for your kind words! All for the visual effect! And of course to focus on the eye of the storm!

Charlie Smith

Date: 12/14/2016 11:55:00 AM

Great work James, never have even attempted Shapes. I have a hard enough time with syllable counts...

Just James
Date: 12/15/2016 1:22:00 PM

Thank you Charlie..you are too modest!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/11/2016 8:22:00 PM

very cool form this is. Just James hmmm. I like that name. Is it for real?

Just James
Date: 12/11/2016 11:02:00 PM

Thank you Andrea...lets call it a flashback!

Chris Green

Date: 12/9/2016 7:11:00 AM

This was amazing, well crafted and very creative. Nicely done James. Oh ...great message too.

Just James
Date: 12/10/2016 5:16:00 AM

Thank you very much Chris for your kind words!

Darren White

Date: 12/9/2016 4:48:00 AM

WoW, I am seriously impressed. This looks incredibly difficult and ingenious! It is not just the shape of the vortex, but how beginning and end words oppose: love-hate; light-black; warm cold, and so on. Wonderful. 7 and fave

Just James
Date: 12/9/2016 7:04:00 AM

Based on Coriolis force this vortex "blows" in Northern hemisphere as it "turns counter clockwise"...crazy...but true!! "lefty loosy" Thanks for kind words Darren!

White Wolf

Date: 12/9/2016 12:51:00 AM

Lovely James!

Just James
Date: 12/9/2016 2:17:00 AM

Thank you Rick!