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Love Letter

On my heart, the words This, my body, the paper My lips where you pause Every curve steeped in promise To be read when you’re in need For Rick Parise Contest Tanka Love Note July 21, 2013

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S.Jagathsimhan Nair

Date: 6/25/2013 10:01:00 AM

Congrats, Eileen, this one is really superb!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/25/2013 10:03:00 AM

Thank you for your kindness, Jag! :)

Heather Ober

Date: 6/25/2013 7:18:00 AM

This is a stunner, my dear! You hit this one out of the park. Big congratulations!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/25/2013 10:04:00 AM

:) You are the stunner, girl....I wonder when you will realize I've written a tribute to you! ;) Hugs!

Elaine George

Date: 6/23/2013 6:39:00 PM

Lovely Eileen. many congrats on your win. Elaine George

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/25/2013 10:03:00 AM

Thanks, Elaine! I do appreciate hearing from you!

Elai Cee

Date: 6/23/2013 4:27:00 AM

congratulations! amazing piece! Talented creature in the world!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/23/2013 7:28:00 AM

:) Thanks, Elai....lovely to hear from you! I'm happy you have visited my work!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/23/2013 12:04:00 AM

and it IS!!! CONGRATULATIONS

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/23/2013 7:29:00 AM

WOW!!!! THANKS ANDREA!!!!

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/22/2013 5:24:00 PM

I agree with Andrea! I like this steamy tanka! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/23/2013 7:29:00 AM

Sweet of you, Kim. I did enjoy writing it so much.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/22/2013 5:14:00 PM

wow, steamy one. ME LIKES a LOT. I sure hope this one is also on the winners list!!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/23/2013 7:30:00 AM

Me likes that you likes! ;)

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/22/2013 4:37:00 PM

Oh, one to savor for when the time is right! I love this theme!! Lovely thoughts, some things can wait until the moment of need. :)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/23/2013 7:31:00 AM

Thanks sweet Carrie...The Bible does say our body is not our own and we should not deprive our mates....Yes, time of need is important. It is important to use this medium to heal pain. Thanks for the visit.

Matthew Anish

Date: 6/22/2013 3:54:00 PM

Nice senryu - good luck in the contest. The last line about "curves" - "drives the fingernail into the heart" - which is what someone once wrote about the rubai form. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/23/2013 7:32:00 AM

Thanks ever so much Matthew....That is an incredible line you've penned. :) I do like the rubai form...will write more on that later.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/22/2013 12:01:00 PM

I told you the last line should not be changed! This is great. congrats. BG

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/22/2013 12:02:00 PM

Took your word for it, my dear! Thanks! :) Hugs!

Richard D Seal

Date: 6/21/2013 11:59:00 AM

I prefer 'To persue for your pleasure', myself lol. This is such a deep write from someone who not long ago was saying "i can't do that". Take care, Richard

Richard D Seal
Date: 6/21/2013 2:10:00 PM

This is a very clever write Eileen. As it's a letter to a lover it reads as a reminder of what he's missing and also if the urge to stray comes to mind to read this and think only of the sender. Therefore your original ending is perfect. My first comment here was only in response to your, 'Hi Everyone Q', and you know i'm going to go for pleasure every time lol. So I'd leave it as is.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/21/2013 12:08:00 PM

Dear Richard....you prefer pursue than peruse??? Hmmmmm...and pleasure to leisure? Well, seeing as peruse is to read thoroughly at leisure...it being what the reader does for pleasure...I still kind of like my own more....what do you think? Convinced? Your opinion matters!!! ;)

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/21/2013 11:22:00 AM

I like it the way it is.. BG

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/21/2013 11:25:00 AM

Thanks for the vote of confidence, Barbara! :)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/21/2013 9:51:00 AM

Hi, Everyone....I wanted your opinion on something...Should that last line stay the way it is or would this be a better ending....To peruse at your leisure....(7 Syllables) What do you think? Opinions are encouraged...I was also thinking of...Read me whenever you wish...tacky? Opinions PLEASE!!!!!

Poet Tacito

Date: 6/21/2013 8:01:00 AM

Imagine if this letter was in braile...this was intense! The way it should be.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/21/2013 9:56:00 AM

Drake...some of it is! ;) Glad you liked it. I hope it does well! you are Richard are naughty today! I guess the poem does bring that out! Oh dear.....I'm in way over my head on this!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/21/2013 7:04:00 AM

I hope he's not a speed reader. I think a man should take time when he reads and savor every moment. Great Tanka!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/21/2013 9:55:00 AM

Well, gentlemen...a good read should not be rushed through, or you will miss the subtle nuances in the lines....However, every now and then, there is nothing quite like a speed read when you are nearing the climax of the plot and are familiar with the book! Oh dear....Richard and Drake...you are both responsible for this!!!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 6/21/2013 8:01:00 AM

"Speed reader", YES!! HA! Love it!

Russell Sivey

Date: 6/21/2013 5:47:00 AM

A surely glorious write my friend! I really loved reading this fine poem this morning! You have painted a fantastic image here Eileen! What a fabulous piece, such a tremendous poem, Great Work!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 6/21/2013 9:52:00 AM

Russell, you are always so generous in your posts. Thanks ever so much for this kind and encouraging comment. :)