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Love Hurts - a Shanzi

hairy white hands clenching into fists jaw tightening quick I step backwards his eyes throwing sparks my breaK-ing nose, my broken heart 7/16/12 For the "Shanzi" contest

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Harry Horsman

Date: 1/18/2013 9:43:00 AM

an oldie,, and wow this is a powerful statemant...

Dinda Minardi

Date: 8/6/2012 9:11:00 AM

A very strong poem in a short form, Susan. Nicely penned.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/26/2012 5:20:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Joann's "Shanzi" contest Susan. Love, Carol

David Williams

Date: 7/22/2012 10:26:00 AM

Susan congrats on your win, now this is something else, I love it..David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/22/2012 9:43:00 AM

WAY TO GO on your well deserved win, Susan. Awesome!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 7/22/2012 9:31:00 AM

Your poems always grip my heart. Love should never hurt. Congrats on your win! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

Kathryn Collins

Date: 7/22/2012 9:20:00 AM

Susan - I hope you have not drawn from personal experience; tragic. These past two are heartbreaking. love, Kathy

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/21/2012 3:15:00 PM

((()))Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Kash Poet

Date: 7/21/2012 8:05:00 AM

Congrats Susan on your win!Enjoyed the read!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/21/2012 5:24:00 AM

congrats Susan on an amazing win for this incredible write.. feeling the essence of your words luv..

Justin Bordner

Date: 7/20/2012 12:01:00 AM

when repaired,sometimes, broken hearts beat more boldly - expression keeps you alive, thanks - J.A.B.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/17/2012 9:15:00 PM

You sure make this guy sound creepy, Susan, with those hairy white hands. Jeepers! A great way to portray a violent relationship!! I was happy to get your recent comment and see you here. Yep, it's been a bit dead lately!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/17/2012 4:42:00 PM

wow so revealing Susan as u describe the worst abuse luv.. best wishes.. a heartbreaker.. thankxx so very much for ,my win in your Forgotten contest luv..am so honored u enjoyed my words from first hand experience with the kids and seniors in my part of town.. it is sad to see them so down and forgotten luv

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/17/2012 12:22:00 PM

rich expressions with pained notes yet beautifully crafted,susan... winning huggs!.. thanks for my placement in your forgotten contest... it was a sad poem too!..:) huggs!

Tammy Bowers

Date: 7/17/2012 11:05:00 AM

Powerful! Thank-you for sharing!~Tammy~

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/16/2012 8:33:00 PM

Lol..good luck...you see... good luck... you see..pd

The Situation

Date: 7/16/2012 7:34:00 PM

your brutal! but i guess violence is also; i have to give you a pass.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 7/16/2012 5:41:00 PM

ouch! great poem, though - hope it's fiction. good luck in the contest!

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 7/16/2012 3:45:00 PM

Well I hate men that hit women.. I hope this is just a fable for the contest.. Re. my poem, I am sending you a cup of raindrops to guide you along lol Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the compliment on the pic.. blushing oxox Michael

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 7/16/2012 3:34:00 PM

Thank you everyone for your title suggestions! When I read Jack's, it just felt right to me, so I went with that. Thanks again! You guys rock!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/16/2012 1:45:00 PM

B.E.S. - good poem for the contest, wish you luck and hope for a win for you. - oxox Anne-Lise

Daver Austin

Date: 7/16/2012 1:21:00 PM

Hi, Susan. Is he the reason for the black eye? Enjoyed mucho. Put some beef steak on that eye. Love, daver

Jack Horne

Date: 7/16/2012 1:16:00 PM

I've been trying to think of a title - how about 'Love Hurts'? or 'Bruised Heart'? Great poem, Susan

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/16/2012 12:34:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your great work..Very descriptive and emotive write..What about Anger's Sparks but might not can do the aprostrophe...Love And Trust Broken could be another possibility...Thanks for stopping by...Sara

Jack Horne

Date: 7/16/2012 12:30:00 PM

heartfelt and scary write here, Susan - so sad to think this sort of thing goes on.