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Lost Rings and Broken Toes

LOST RINGS AND BROKEN TOES a sultry summer night entices exposed-- unclothed immersion sinking into velvet water body twirls as fingertips brush echoing aqua circles by moonlight
flash of silver flies high lands in darkened flora the ring that binds lost love in a maze of undergrowth ambiences swim into reality wet feet trip on slippery tiles in hasty panic searching torch on hands and knees in shrubbery pain ignored as ring unearthed precious gem worth broken toe © Kim van Breda-- March 2014 ( True story.. and yes.. my left baby toe is really sore..) :)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 3/11/2014 2:21:00 PM
a nice story... be careful next time, Sissy!!! ...nice catch ^__6
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Date: 3/7/2014 5:27:00 PM
A well told story. Love the way you've framed it too, well done.
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Date: 3/7/2014 4:32:00 PM
- A pain so great both for the loss of the ring and pain on the baby toe - Hope you found the ring ..... and toes will be good again - Gotta say I smiled a little of your story .... my advice: never bathe naked. .... after the sun has gone down :))) - Nice to read, Kim. - Have a great weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/7/2014 11:55:00 AM
No more skinny-dipping for you? Or less spontaneously next time. Glad you found ring.
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Date: 3/7/2014 11:13:00 AM
I can still hear your sigh of relief...your thumping heart. Well written; love the first stanza. // paul
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Date: 3/7/2014 10:56:00 AM
Hope you are ok Kim..I bet you are happy to find the ring....Tim
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