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Awakened at dawn, by the slightest of sound, there is nothing to hear but the rain. The dripping from eaves makes a rhythm, somehow, one drop at a time, to the ground. As I turn to my side, the light from the sun spreads gold on your brow, then moves on… You sleep undisturbed, far away in a dream and I want to dive into the stream. Into those turbulent seas, into ardent blue skies, ...into moonbeams that have gilded your eyes. Sealed deeply inside, is there something that hides? What is it you see, with your slumbering eyes? Are there paintings of shorelines? Is there someone adoring? I lie now and wait, as the dark fades away, seeking your eyes in the dawn. A flutter of lash, a dash of a smile,…I must wait for the day to arrive. Then you open your eyes, with a light that I've seen, that is filled bright with gold, just for me. Nothing is heard but the drops of the rain. One pearl at a time, from the eaves, like a chain. You were gone for awhile, while I was lost in a dream. Now I'm lost in the smile of your eyes. ... and see nothing but gold in the dawn ____________________________________________________________ 7/10/17

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Date: 4/20/2018 4:40:00 AM
- Congratulations on your 2nd place in the contest, Carrie :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/19/2018 9:09:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this beautiful poetic poem! Enjoyed it.
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Date: 4/19/2018 8:13:00 PM
You captured the longing for love and connection so well in this great poem, Carrie! Nicely penned! Congrats on your win :)
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Date: 4/19/2018 4:40:00 PM
Thanks for entering my contest, Carrie, with this lovely poem capturing a beautiful moment. Congrats on your silver medal win.
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Date: 1/25/2018 2:57:00 PM
Been a while. Almost forgot how eloquent you are. Always a pleasure to read.
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Date: 1/8/2018 9:16:00 AM
What an excellent poem.. been so long since you have graced us with your presence....
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Date: 11/29/2017 12:25:00 PM
This is extremely lovely and gentle, Carrie. The smile of the eyes just cannot be ignored! I like this free verse tinged with sporadic rhyme. ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 8/16/2017 4:29:00 PM
I loved this poem, Carrie Quiet rain endears me to love! I hope you won a placement.
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Date: 8/11/2017 9:25:00 AM
intriguing poetry, as usual you do not disappoint, this is truly wonderful.
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Date: 7/25/2017 7:23:00 AM
Wonderful perceptions...morning smiles - free verse with some sneaky rhyme and could be easily labeled Blank Verse with its anapestic meter. You don't do it on purpose but that's what makes it wonderfully natural.
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Date: 7/10/2017 10:11:00 PM
Sounds like a winner! So beautiful, Carrie!
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Date: 7/10/2017 9:58:00 PM
I like how you used the rising of dawn and the eyes opening to give light to you from both...good luck poet
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