Looking In

Looking In May I lean on the cold glass now and look into a world stolen from me condensing words to cold brittle panes obscuring my likeness I am no longer there And as you abide now in the transplanted warmth of my heart I will try to kiss the continuum that was once so part of my life So have I lost the feel of your skin now have I lost your glance now that you have disengaged your limbs from our dance Separated now by the barrier of trickling smiles left in tears on cold winter glass I face it alone the smiles have gone to their home they made in the past

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Hana Ryusaka

Date: 3/7/2009 4:26:00 PM

Wow. This is simply gorgeous... although sad :( I love "condensing words to cold brittle panes obscuring my likeness" Great job! Thanks for commenting on Waiting!

Sharon Winter

Date: 3/4/2009 5:47:00 AM

Sad, sad, sad. I will try to be hopeful and say, a reason for everything, as someone meant to be, meant to stay, will come along soon, and overfill the void. As far as your writing goes, brilliant and full of great depth, as always. Love, Shar

Laurie Ginn

Date: 3/3/2009 7:03:00 PM

This makes me gasp for breath its so sad especially the last stanza. beautifully done Col.

Christopher Higgins

Date: 3/3/2009 4:29:00 PM

This is a moving piece of writing..kiss the continum speaks loudly..disengaged your limbs...also very moving.. this is a deep piece filled with emotions and makes the reader feel what the voice in the poem is feeling.

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/3/2009 4:16:00 PM

So heartfelt, sad, outside looking in...very touching and painful...so well done. You did an amazing job here with this soulful poem. ~ Carrie

Lena Townsend

Date: 3/3/2009 2:56:00 PM

This flows so smoothe and is written in such clearity. It is tough to face anything alone and life is never easy. You bring some peace with your words. Thank you for sharing. Smiles from Lolita

John Loving Iii

Date: 3/3/2009 2:54:00 PM

colin this was so deep and the meanings that you discribe soooo artfully. it's on my favorites list already. you made my day keep up the great work. John Henry Loving III