Longing

How I long to be like the wind, Blowing softly through your hair. A gentle breeze to touch your skin, A silent whisper just to be there! ~ How I long to be the chosen flower, You pick for your crystal vase. Placed in your lighted bower, So I can see your face! ~ How I long to be like a raindrop, Gently clinging to your skin. Creating rainbows that never stop, And happiness within! ~ © Bjørn O. Wastvedt, 2017

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/27/2017 8:56:00 AM

This is great poetry, Bjørn, welcome to Poetry Soup:)

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/30/2017 12:23:00 AM

Thank you, Jo! :)

Elaine George

Date: 11/26/2017 6:19:00 PM

Absolutely beautiful!!! Sincerely, Elaine

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/30/2017 12:23:00 AM

Thank you, Elaine! :)

Akkina Downing

Date: 11/18/2017 7:08:00 AM

It's a sad feeling of longing for something we could never have. But Bjorn, this was well expressed and beautiful. Welcome to souppoetry new friend... hugs and smiles :)

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/18/2017 11:20:00 AM

So true - thank you, Akkina! :)

Line Gauthier

Date: 11/17/2017 10:53:00 PM

Beautiful and very romantic.

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/18/2017 12:15:00 AM

Thank you, Line! :)

Isor Chand

Date: 11/17/2017 2:06:00 PM

Oh a Second Shakespeare Alive !!! Great job to your mind blowing poem...

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/17/2017 10:34:00 PM

Thank You, Isor! :)

Edward Mccall

Date: 11/12/2017 7:43:00 AM

You paint so beautifully with words Bjorn I can't wait to read your next poem.

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/12/2017 3:45:00 PM

Thank you, Edward! :)

Line Gauthier

Date: 11/11/2017 10:02:00 PM

Lovely imagery. Wonderful poem. Well done, Bjorn. Congratulations.

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/12/2017 3:45:00 PM

Thank you, Line! :)

Tom Rutherford

Date: 11/9/2017 8:24:00 PM

Such heartfelt verbal artistry Bjorn! Keep up the great writing!

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/10/2017 6:39:00 PM

Thank you, Tom! :)

Jan Allison

Date: 11/8/2017 7:28:00 PM

what a joy to read your first poem on soup Bjorn, its a beautiful romantic poem and I especially like the rhyme and the lovely flow of the lines:-) hugs jan xx

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/10/2017 6:41:00 PM

Thank you, Jan! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/5/2017 7:30:00 PM

this is so pretty and romantic. Great job, Bjorn. Sure hope to see more from you. You chose a very nice poetry form to write in with Quintain. Let's see MORE>

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/5/2017 11:56:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea! :)

Becca Teagan

Date: 11/4/2017 11:21:00 PM

Hi Bjorn :) This is such a romantic poem. I love the part about wanting to be a raindrop clinging to her skin. I love how you wrote this in rhyme, it flows so nicely, but I also think this would make a very beautiful free-verse poem too, where you're not limited to words that have to rhyme. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. I would like to invite you to come to my blog and introduce yourself, if you'd like. Welcome to Poetry Soup!

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/5/2017 6:52:00 PM

Thank you, Becca . . . :)

Becca Teagan
Date: 11/4/2017 11:21:00 PM

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Bjorn Wastvedt

Date: 11/4/2017 10:45:00 PM

When I first wrote this poem, I wrote the 3rd line in 2nd verse as: "placed among lighted candles" that I like better, but it doesn't rhyme with flower - a word I wanted most of all. What do you think? Here is what I wrote: How I long to be the chosen flower, You pick for your crystal vase. Placed among lighted candles, So I can see your face!

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/4/2017 11:42:00 PM

Thank you for help and comments! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/4/2017 11:09:00 PM

I think the way you wrote it in your posted poem is truly beautiful and expresses your feeling in a wonderfully intimate way :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/4/2017 7:10:00 PM

Ohh Bjorn, your poem so beautifully expresses the melancholy of unrequited love. Very romantic with amazing and lovely imagery. Enjoyed and I look forward to reading more of your writes. Welcome to Poetry Soup!

Bjorn Wastvedt
Date: 11/4/2017 10:47:00 PM

Thank you, Susan! :)