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Lonely Lighthouse

The Smeaton Eddystone's architecture First lighthouse protecting navigators Light blinking, pulsating, luminously Loud foghorn resounding resonantly Guides shipwrecked mariners vigilantly Or swarthy seafarers incessantly On oceans perilous, tempestuous A sailor’s salvation eternally 09~19~14 Jan Allison Contest: The Lighthouse Sponsor: Nette Onclaud Form: Rhopalic verse ~awarded 1st place

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Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/14/2014 8:51:00 AM

Remember the error. You had first place with this masterpiece.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/14/2014 10:35:00 AM

Thanks my friend you have made my day:-) hugs jan xxx

Seren Roberts

Date: 10/3/2014 7:49:00 AM

Excellent Jan very well done, congrats....Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 10/3/2014 7:56:00 AM

many thanks for dropping by Seren:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Schneiter

Date: 10/1/2014 9:17:00 PM

Dear Jan, This is awesome (and fantastic, and incredible, and magnificent, and marvelous, and . . . . ) Oops, I forgot to mention wonderful and exceptional. Congratulations on a stellar composition. * * * Thank you for your kind words about "Rainbows." And thank you for all you so thoughtfully do to encourage poets on this site. You're a sweetheart.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/2/2014 1:13:00 AM

Oh Paul I am blushing now at your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/30/2014 7:07:00 PM

You were so gracious you congratulated everyone.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2014 1:11:00 AM

I always try to Maurice:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/30/2014 7:06:00 PM

Imagine all the people that can't congratulate you because they don't know you were NUMBER ONE NUMERO UNO...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2014 1:11:00 AM

I always try and congratulate the winners especially if i entered the contest - I know I won thats the main thing:-)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/30/2014 6:57:00 PM

I already faved it, but I can give it another 7!!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2014 1:10:00 AM

:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/30/2014 6:55:00 PM

CONGRATULATIONS YOU'RE NUMBER ONE!!!! NÚMERO UNO CONGRATULATIONS!!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2014 1:09:00 AM

Aww thanks Maurice:-) Hugs jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/30/2014 3:34:00 PM

Wow, Jan congratulations. 1st place, you are doing absolutely fantastic. It seems as your pen has found it's magic my friend. XXOO

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2014 3:37:00 PM

I can't get over how well I am doing Brenda - its wonderful people like YOU who spur me on to believe in myself and push myself try new forms and become a better poet:-) hugs jan xxxx

Tim Smith

Date: 9/30/2014 11:49:00 AM

Congrats... Woohoo... Well deserving.... Hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2014 12:03:00 PM

Many thanks Tim I am on cloud 9 at being awarded a first place - Nette had a problem posting the winners ! hugs Jan xxxxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/28/2014 11:32:00 AM

From the dialogue I see you having below, I would guess that she made up her mind before your revisions, because frankly, this is a GOOD poem, Jan. I like how you focused on just ONE specific lighthouse. it is one of the better ones I saw in this challenge!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2014 11:46:00 AM

Thanks Andrea - now worries anyway i am pleased with my poem the positive feedback i got:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/28/2014 11:14:00 AM

I fixed it. With all my comments now your lighthouse isn't lonely anymore.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2014 11:19:00 AM

:-) thank you. hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/28/2014 11:12:00 AM

I wish you had gotten at least my place. I prefer yours to mine.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2014 11:18:00 AM

Aww Maurice you are making me teary with such kind words like that I will need a lifeboat to stem the flood of tears:-) Hugs jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/28/2014 11:10:00 AM

I just added it to my favs because I do love it. There is one thing I wonder though. I wonder if she only read your original piece. I would not be surprised if that happened. This site is full of quirks and I wonder if your edit never showed up on her list.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2014 11:17:00 AM

That's possible Maurice but Nette did mail me to say it needed amending to include the 4th syllable - no worries its only a contest and i did get a first yesterday and was over the moon with that:-) hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/28/2014 11:06:00 AM

Jan the only reason you didn't get placed is because you did such a good job. It is titled "Lonely Lighthouse" and low and behold it is lonely...especially today. If you had named it "Accepting All Visitors" I think it would of placed number 1.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2014 11:14:00 AM

LOl Maurice - thanks for cheering me up with that lovely comment - it was a tough form and I didn't get placed I will try harder next time:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/28/2014 10:43:00 AM

This is a marvelous write Jan. Congratulations this poem placed high in my heart.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2014 10:49:00 AM

It didn't get placed in the contest Maurice but yours and Casarah's did so I am made up for you - I can't understand the top place as it didn't follow the syllable count but hey ho back to the writing board LOL:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Cynthia Ferguson

Date: 9/25/2014 5:44:00 AM

that is so nice, I love light houses , I lived across from boston light house many years and visited many of them in the harbors near me, they are so full of what they have seen, one near scituate ma,they have one called the I love you light house, it is timed to blink out I love you , all have so many interesting stories to them,

Jan Allison
Date: 9/25/2014 7:14:00 AM

oh what a delightful story Cynthia you should do a poem about it:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/22/2014 12:42:00 PM

EXCELLENT!!!! You nailed it.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2014 12:46:00 PM

Thanks Maurice I just hope Nette likes it - I hadn't read the rules properly but I have tried hard to please her:-) Hugs Jan xxx

David Mohn

Date: 9/21/2014 8:11:00 PM

Nailed it Jan...nicely written

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2014 1:03:00 AM

Thanks David:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/21/2014 12:57:00 AM

Lighthouses must have saved the lives of countless people over the years. There is a sense of serenity, safety, and mystery about them.... I really enjoyed this poem and the atmosphere it creates. Terrific writing, Jan! Good luck in Nette's contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2014 3:39:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Kelly:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/20/2014 10:17:00 PM

yes, Nette often has some pretty great challenges for us, Jan!! wish I had time to even do this one yet!!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2014 3:39:00 AM

YOU will do an amazing one Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/20/2014 3:30:00 PM

Excellent, Jan. I love this one.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2014 3:38:00 AM

:-) so true Maurice I try not to say this poem is a winner as there are times I've had it said to me and I've not been placed - all down to personal opinion.. I just enjoy trying to do as well as I can for the challenge. hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/20/2014 7:21:00 PM

That is the benefit of form it forces us to be more creative within the confines of its structure. This is perfect as it is. Also we all have to remember when we enter these contests we are at the mercy of only one person's opinion. God bless them for taking on such a difficult task. I am sure that anyone who loses is less than happy except for three musketeers of course but the rest of them are like that. But not your online hubby.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2014 7:06:00 PM

I'd have loved more imagery but felt if i added a fourth syllable then it would be needed on each line so i chickened out with just three:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/20/2014 6:13:00 PM

You must of got the form dead on. It reads easy. It might has well have been Free Verse, you did so well with it.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2014 4:45:00 PM

Thanks Maurice Its a tough form thought I would give it my best shot:-) hugs jan xxx

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 9/20/2014 7:11:00 AM

There is plenty of life over here Jan, and for good reason , Great job on this one.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2014 7:16:00 AM

Thanks Jerry for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts

Date: 9/19/2014 8:56:00 PM

Jan this is great, ....Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2014 2:20:00 AM

Thanks Seren I found it a really tough challenge:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/19/2014 8:34:00 PM

oh that last line is quite a lovely tie up. I did not even look at this contest yet. Gotta check it out!!! Nicely done, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2014 2:20:00 AM

Thanks Andrea I found it a tough form but I love the challenges Nette sets us:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/19/2014 5:48:00 PM

Thank you for the reply, I tooooo Hope they get better... well to tell you the truth, they are not.. However, I'm trying my best to move on... :(...LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 9/19/2014 5:53:00 PM

I know it will be tough Linda I guess time will be a healer :-) Hugs Jan xxx