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Lonely

"only heartache, despair, depression to give company!" (By Poet) a picture of loneliness struck me hard, when I saw her sitting on a bench at scenic seaside... face lined with years of anxiety and toil, vacant eyes fixed at the horizon,  where the last rays of glimmering sun going down the lapping emerald waters of the ocean! You can be lonely even in a crowd!  There are so many people around her,  Do they understand how deserted she feels!  She has worked hard for family all her life,  neglected her own comfort to wipe their tears,  encouraged them to stand tall in distress, in sickness, spent sleepless nights by their bedside, toiled in the kitchen for countless hours to provide healthy food, baked cookies and cakes for celebrations, so they enjoy the feasts! But one day… she finds a dejected, lonely herself!  money, gifts…nothing matters!  cars, jewellery! useless to her.  a luxurious house...feels a burden! She wants to connect with them, for them to feel the emptiness - a ruptured thread - in her heart  which she suffers alone!  Nobody is at her side! A haze blocks communication, only heartache, despair, depression to give company! March 16, 2023 For "L" words Poetry Contest Theme: Lonely Sponsor: Constance La France FIRST PLACE Strand 1201 Poetry Contest

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Date: 4/3/2023 2:55:00 PM
Mala, excellent writing and thank you for sharing your poem in my Writing Challenge congratulations !
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Date: 3/21/2023 10:36:00 AM
Mala, congratulations on your first place win with another poetic gem highlighting the isolation and loneliness that so often occurs with the celebration of many candles on a birthday cake. Your words draw me into that lonely place so effectively. Are you also hinting at the effects of dementia - "a haze blocks communication?" Well done, dear friend. May blessings fill your days and nights.
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Date: 3/17/2023 11:50:00 AM
A poignant write on how people can disconnect when their hearts are empty, Congrats on your win Malabika
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/17/2023 1:50:00 PM
Thank you, Joseph. Loneliness can be so cruel - many people experience at their mature age! Appreciate your kind visit and beautiful comment.
Date: 3/17/2023 10:09:00 AM
Dear Mala, Your poem is poignant and beautiful. I think the saddest thing is someone who has no one. Especially the elderly who sit alone. Congratulations on your First Place!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/17/2023 1:48:00 PM
Dear Ann, it didn’t take a very long time to pen this poem. I have seen this melancholic loneliness in elderly - breaks my heart!
Date: 3/17/2023 8:33:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win with this touching and lovely poem, Mala :) - hugs
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/17/2023 1:45:00 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise. Truly appreciate your visit and comment.
Date: 3/17/2023 7:15:00 AM
"You can be lonely even in a crowd", "she suffers alone" - Great and realistic picture painted on lonely women. A beautiful work. Congratulations!
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/17/2023 7:48:00 AM
Thank you, Dear Poet-friend! This picture just came...often ponder about lonely souls..so hard for them to keep going! I enjoyed your brilliant collection of poems while spending a very quiet time in India. Just to let you know - Your Book is shining on the shelf of RK Mission library. Best wishes ~ Mala
Date: 3/17/2023 7:03:00 AM
Wow Mala. Desolation, isolation, loss - everything in one poignant poem. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/17/2023 7:43:00 AM
Thank you, Linda. It just came...although we can view loneliness from a different angle too. Sometimes staying alone becomes a blessing. Warm wishes to you, Linda. Really appreciate your visit.
Date: 3/16/2023 3:16:00 PM
Hello mala, yes a person can feel lonely in a crowd. Or in a room full of people. Or a family gathering. Love & Friendship, /Darlene/
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 3/17/2023 12:37:00 PM
Hello Mala, it is good to see you back, You are swelcome. Love & Friendship / Darlene/
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/16/2023 3:20:00 PM
Thanks, Darlene, for your kind visit and insightful comment. Really appreciate. Love and friendship ~ Mala
Date: 3/16/2023 9:29:00 AM
Great imagery with heart feelings. Great for the contest, Malabika, I enjoyed reading. Hugs eve
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/16/2023 9:35:00 AM
Thank you, Eve. Truly appreciate your visit and inspiring comment.

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