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Listen To the Sun

Ignorance is bliss or so they say But I was enlightened in a colorful way In a silent conversation with our old friend The sun told me this at yesterdays' end He was glowing dark red in an angry display For the constant pollution while we worked and played Blended red and yellow showing orange disgust A colorful sign of his negative distrust Then passionate red for the love he shares An approving gesture he thinks we still care His friendship was kissed with a touch of pink Reminding us all to stop and think A moody dark purple of sadness and gloom Fair warning try harder or we'll all be doomed Then splashes light purple for days gone by Feeling nostalgic for clear blue skies As his dark blue of power turned to black Leaving hope for tomorrow that he'd be back Now that I've told you of all I have learned Don't you think we should all be more seriously concerned If you don't believe me and still wear a frown Then tomorrow just listen as the sun goes down an original poem by the "poemdog" Daniel Turner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 7/1/2017 9:51:00 AM
You outdid yourself with this hip, flowing write, Poemdog. Such a cool, creative poem. I really dig this one. And I learned something too ... got a bonus, who knew. You got so much talent oozing out of your golden pen, my friend. Love and peace always and forever.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 7/1/2017 10:03:00 AM
Thank you, Freddie. You are too kind:)
Date: 8/17/2016 2:25:00 PM
Very nice imagination...Daniel, I liked the way you described the colours... especially the two lines "As his dark blue of power turned to black....Leaving hope for tomorrow that he'd be back"....beautiful.
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Date: 8/17/2016 2:28:00 PM
Thank you Meenakshi. I had to research what all of the colors meant but it was a fun write. It pleases me immensely that you took the time to read. I am glad you liked it.
Date: 1/27/2016 9:42:00 PM
Really fantastic! So Nice!
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/27/2016 9:48:00 PM
Thank you, Jeannie, I appreciate you reading and commenting.
Date: 1/27/2016 12:36:00 PM
Well done my friend... deft couplet rhyming and smooth flow. We take her for granted simply because she is always there... until. Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 1/27/2016 1:05:00 PM
Thank you my friend. I value your opinion.
Date: 1/27/2016 8:29:00 AM
Your words where enchanting and you pulled off a great bit of poetry here with a deeper meaning submerged within their wisdom. Emile.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/27/2016 8:33:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words and insight. I'm honored by your visit.
Date: 1/26/2016 8:00:00 PM
I could not agree more with S O's comment. This is very well written, the flow, the rhyme, and the subtle message you are giving us in not so subtle a way. Love it!
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/26/2016 8:14:00 PM
Thank you for your support. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/26/2016 4:50:00 PM
Beautifully penned...best wishes
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/26/2016 4:56:00 PM
Thank you , Joseph. I appreciate your kind words and you taking the time to read and comment.

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