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Lights Out

Unknown to me these people in this room Attempted murders, drug dealers and thieves, is what I presume... I have never known to have such fear, and being in this predicament is rather *****. God has always been so lenient with his heart But this last crime, I think I lit his anger with a spark My thoughts in conference confirmed, I was being greedy Now I'm stuck in a confinement for the meek and needy Fear has settled deep inside my chest Cut up women screams her mind to rest I ask the corrections: "How much longer, 'till I'm spared?" He walks away, for my voice just wasn't glared Please I whisper, as my hopes fill up with doubt He just stares at me then yells: "LIGHTS OUT!!"

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/22/2010 8:42:00 AM

Congratulations Jessica on your win in Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen's contest "Lights Out". Love, Carol

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/22/2010 6:45:00 AM

A very very unique take on the topic and very real! You know it's an excellent write but a tiny, wee bit, ohhhhhhh so tiny...(duck) to syllable count would really put the cherry on the sundae? Congrad's BIG HUG Light & Love

Joyce Johnson

Date: 7/21/2010 10:17:00 PM

Congratulations Jessica with your win with this quite different take on the contest. Very good. Love, Joyce

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 7/21/2010 2:19:00 PM

I wish to thank you for your comments. They mean a lot. This sounds rather perilous. Check verse 2. Might that be lenient rather than lineant. I would hate to see this piece slide for spelling, if that's the word. Good luck in the contest. Regards, Gerard

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/21/2010 1:02:00 PM

Congrats Jessica on your winning poem in the Lights Out contest... an amazing write and win for u to enjoy.. with luv..

Skat A

Date: 7/20/2010 7:31:00 PM

WELL DONE WITH THE SONNET JESSICA, NICE.-SKAT

David Byrne

Date: 7/19/2010 4:08:00 PM

Great sonnet love the line"I think I lit his anger with a spark"

Sammy Shaq

Date: 7/19/2010 3:18:00 PM

beautifully imagery here with such great talent and terrificly amusing. great write, sami.

Gert W. Knop

Date: 7/19/2010 6:49:00 AM

Wow, that is a well written Sonnet and I hope that this was only fiction! Que bien escrito!!! Thank you for your kind comment on Roadside (on my facebook album I have posted a photo to this one) Have a nice week! Gert:)