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I sit and watch you smile. Is that an unearthly light? You came from darkness. I witness reflected light. I'm inexplicably drawn towards you Your sweet presence makes my spirit feel light. From uplifted branches colored leaves fall. Dancing around you in glowing sun light! A shadow falls across you pretty face You return to darkness, there is no light Perhaps I imagined you sitting there A wondrous thought bathed in unearthly light First attempt at this form.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 11/7/2013 8:11:00 PM
I wouldn't worry to much about being your first attempt Rick, the content was magical and it all worked for me. Take care, Richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/7/2013 8:29:00 PM
Thanks Richard, as always you are very kind.
Date: 11/4/2013 7:58:00 AM
Nice take with apt theme for the Ghazal, Richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/4/2013 9:02:00 AM
Thanks Dr Ram.
Date: 11/4/2013 7:11:00 AM
deep and spiritual Rick fine pen Ty for your review on Men I have been ill so am far behind on answering remarks. Shadow x smile
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/4/2013 7:37:00 AM
I'm sorry to hear you have not been well. Thanks for thinking about me.
Date: 11/3/2013 10:15:00 PM
I have to say, I am jealous, that's truly amazing. Sorry Eileen I have to give him a Wow too!!! LOL
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 11/4/2013 9:05:00 AM
Arthur......that's OK. He deserves it! ;)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/4/2013 7:37:00 AM
Thanks Arhur.
Date: 11/3/2013 3:41:00 PM
You did a good job, Rick. You always amaze me of how you like to try new things. Adventurous spirit. Very good!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/4/2013 7:38:00 AM
I enjoy bending my mind around new ideas.
Date: 11/3/2013 3:09:00 PM
I love it...Ghazal is an Arabic form of poetry used to praise....You amaze!!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/4/2013 7:39:00 AM
I learned something new, thanks for the history lesson, that is very cool.
Date: 11/3/2013 3:08:00 PM
Hello Richard, i love this one... such a strange way drawing in light around shadows. amazing UNEARTHLY imagery... deep enough I find your daze comes from another world... ((nice first attempt)) always~ LINDA
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/4/2013 7:41:00 AM
Thanks Linda, I appreciate you being the first to comment.

Book: Shattered Sighs