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Lets Make a Deal

To love or not to love That is the cue With my all and all I’m in love with you To be or not to be My debt is owed to thee My oath is not to flee Your so a part of me You are the bow that ties me I’m in this up to my neck I wish my soul hire me To try to pay this debt You are the sun that warm me And the moon of my nite The kid so shy that buys me And give me my own life My head is in a spin From the show of your grin My day made to keep My idea for you to seek And nite my time to deal With what it is I feel My soul says keep it real We have to make this deal

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Bill Baker

Date: 10/10/2023 9:59:00 PM

Thanks for telling it like it is, TS. At least you're telling how you feel about this relationship. It's tough when one sided, or when only one side says I love you. Keep loving, my friend ... someone is out there looking for you. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/3/2023 8:17:00 AM

your poem had a nice rhythm to it. Seeking love and making a deal...keeping it real is paramount. Loved this one. Have a splendid day, Sara

Karen Croft

Date: 10/2/2023 11:56:00 PM

What a beautiful poem.

Akkina Downing

Date: 10/2/2023 8:42:00 PM

The title alone is awesome. And the whole poem is beautiful. ^_^

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/2/2023 12:52:00 PM

...even if thou shalt flee, I know it's myne thou lips will taste, and if thou may dream tonite, let me bleed into your heart... words so real they'll sooth thou, myne bard. I tried! ~Sugar Kisses

Susan Lawrence

Date: 10/2/2023 7:20:00 AM

Sweet. I enjoyed the rhythm of this and ~ my soul says keep it real! Susan

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/2/2023 5:03:00 AM

Ahhh!! Such a nice love poem for the person you love. Nice to read this morning. Thanks for sharing it and for dropping by my page. Sara

Yann Rolland

Date: 10/2/2023 12:04:00 AM

keep it real, not so easy sometimes, enjoyed reading this delicious declaration have a sweet day

Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 10/1/2023 5:11:00 PM

Nice piece of writing.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/1/2023 4:47:00 PM

Nice rhythm in your word weaving. Well crafted n i love “to love or not to love” always love. “ you are the sun ..l” “ the moon …” very sweet, yes the real deal is to keep it real go with the flow: love this

Karen Jones

Date: 10/1/2023 4:10:00 PM

Cute idea executed well. I like "My head is in a spin. From the show of your grin."