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She hugged her shoulders in the morning mist, the sun struggled to pierce the charcoal shroud, beside her someone turned, his lover kissed, she left as he dissolved into the crowd. The platform full, she stared along the rails, he said he'd be along on the next train, last chance for them, or else the marriage fails, ten years to make it work, but all in vain. He left for someone else, she could not cope, another man like him she would not find, her thoughts now focussed on this one last hope when someone rushing pushed her from behind. He heard the guard say 'please remain inside' and thought 'I hope she's not seen someone's died'... For contest 'Your finest Sonnet', sponsor Mark Massey 22nd July 2018

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Date: 7/28/2018 6:48:00 AM
Great sonnet, Viv. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 7/26/2018 6:02:00 AM
My friend, I bow to the creativity and depth of this exceptionally crafted sonnet! You are a wonderful sonneteer. A fav.. a shining jewel..
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Date: 7/24/2018 5:00:00 PM
Very mysterious and eerie, Viv!! Also well metered sonnet from you! question for you in soupmail.
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Date: 7/23/2018 1:16:00 PM
This train was fueled by your atomic ink! E=MC squared! You smoked it!
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Date: 7/23/2018 9:20:00 AM
Now that’s how to tell a story!
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Date: 7/22/2018 7:50:00 PM
Viv, your story-telling enthralled me and I didn't want it to end.. tragic, captivating, intriguing and dramatic.. a beautifully written and superb sonnet! Best wishes for a win my friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 7/22/2018 3:31:00 PM
Love the sonnet the train, and your poetry..Made my day.
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Date: 7/22/2018 2:26:00 PM
Very dramatic and very sad. This one's like the intro to a murder mystery. Very compelling. Good luck in the contest, Viv.
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Date: 7/22/2018 11:14:00 AM
Well written sonnet Viv, I could see the old station ,lots of steam and smell of coal. Good luck. Tom
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Date: 7/22/2018 9:24:00 AM
Viv, oh a great story and I wanted more.. and in sonnet too! Wonderful...
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Date: 7/22/2018 8:15:00 AM
You always shine at your ability to generate a great story. A brilliant sonnet Viv! : )
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Date: 7/22/2018 8:01:00 AM
Great story-telling in excellent sonnet form!
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Date: 7/22/2018 7:24:00 AM
Well written .Captivating Viv :)
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Date: 7/22/2018 5:01:00 AM
The bard would have been delighted with the tragic ending to the sonnet Mr Viv, I got chills down my spine reading your fine poem, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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