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I've been here since the start of the night lonley and nursing this premium beer No one would think me the confident one For many nights I've hung around here Doing my best to smile my shy smile Wishing and hoping you'll see it dear? As I desperately imagine you venturing near A quiet voice not meant for a noisy bar I'm not a rich guy I don't have a fancy car If you want respect I'll treat you like a star Others might go further But I'll be where you are Good guys don't need to finish last Gaze at me, so it won't be true Those gorgeous eyes and pretty face Grant me the gift of sitting next to you You'll make this cowboy a happy guy Just a bit of time, a minute or two I can see a bit of sadness in your brown eyes I'm willing to listen to all that makes you blue Don't rush away, take your time With you lady I'm more then content Let me sit here and enjoy that lovely laugh I may sound corny but it sounds heaven sent Nothing is to trivial, tell me about it all Moment to moment, a night well spent Until the bartender tells us that it's "last call." You smile at me and say "I like how this went!" I ask the bartender to bring a few more drinks This has gone a whole lot better then I thought You, pretty lady, Who I admired from afar You seem to like this quiet Cowboy a lot You are oh so sweet and easy to talk to And my stuttering tongue is not tied in a knot You whisper, "If you have just a few hundreds left, there are things I can do that will please you a lot!" For Casarah's contest Written October 15, 2015.

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Date: 10/29/2015 12:35:00 PM
Big Kudos on this winner, Richard. I think I've been to this place before.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/30/2015 8:40:00 AM
Thanks Dan, much appreciated.
Date: 10/27/2015 9:56:00 PM
Hello Handsome, some women know how to take advantage. Enjoyed.. SKAT
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/28/2015 8:25:00 AM
That is true, some med as well.
Date: 10/26/2015 9:55:00 PM
Congratulations! CayCay
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/28/2015 8:25:00 AM
Thanks Cay Cay.
Date: 10/26/2015 2:32:00 PM
Congratulations Richard on your top win
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/28/2015 8:26:00 AM
Thanks Greg.
Date: 10/26/2015 2:10:00 PM
What a twist~ a much enjoyed adventure and take on the prompt. Thanks for entering and congrats on 1st place ;)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/28/2015 8:28:00 AM
This was a fun contest and I appreciate you picking this one for the category! Hugs Rick.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/28/2015 8:26:00 AM
Thanks Casarah.
Date: 10/18/2015 1:09:00 PM
Dear Richard This has to be one of the best good old boy, sad cowboy write I've read here on the soup, poor fellow, I've seen him sitting alone at a few old bars of the past, not so long ago, now I wish I would have paid more attaintion to him, good luck in the contest love the ending by the way it pulled the whole poem together beautifully, cheri and thanks for your awesome comments cheri
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2015 2:28:00 PM
My pleasure Cherl, thanks for commenting on mine as well.
Date: 10/18/2015 8:43:00 AM
Oh, poor romantic befuddled cowboy. I was rooting for him to get the girl. I love the way you veered off at the end.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2015 10:55:00 AM
Ha ha, I'm glad I surprised you.
Date: 10/17/2015 6:09:00 AM
Full marks to you, Richard! Truly enjoyed this poem right to the last call. I'm sorry for both the cowboy and myself...we were both taken in by her!! I expect this to more than attract Casarah's attention. // paul
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/17/2015 9:40:00 AM
I hope your right Paul! Thanks for commenting.
Date: 10/17/2015 2:28:00 AM
I can easily hear this imaginative write playing on a country radio station. It is romantic and full of emotion, as well as entertaining - I was rooting for him and then I was floored, with him. Last stanza, 3rd line needs some space for clarity. Good luck in the contest ... CayCay
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/17/2015 9:38:00 AM
Thanks for your help Cay Cay.
Date: 10/16/2015 5:37:00 PM
G'day Richard... you hit me with a sledgehammer with the final two lines. Your cowboy is as gullible as me - great poem - Lindsay
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/17/2015 9:39:00 AM
Ha ha! Glad you were surprised.
Date: 10/16/2015 10:21:00 AM
Nope, didn't see that coming. Hmmmmmm.....brown eyed lady wants to play, eh? Good luck in the contest.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2015 1:05:00 PM
Ha ha, what can I say, I'm a sucker for brown eyes. This poor cowboy ended up going home all alone.
Date: 10/16/2015 2:58:00 AM
A smooth poem with a great twist Richard! I really enjoyed it from beginning to end! #7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2015 7:47:00 AM
Thanks Connie.
Date: 10/16/2015 12:13:00 AM
lol hey who do you think you are? Me? Loved this, amazing!!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2015 7:48:00 AM
Thanks Arthur.
Date: 10/15/2015 11:56:00 PM
Richard this was humorous and sad. The ending was great. I thought it was all that charm you were giving off but I guess I was wrong. It was the charm that was in your wallet. This is a very nice entry. I liked reading it read it twice. Good luck Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2015 7:49:00 AM
Thanks, I reworked the last stanza a bit.
Date: 10/15/2015 8:15:00 PM
I enjoyed your meter and your rhyme which delivered your verse in perfect time, flawless form :0, jill and....it,s a 7!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/15/2015 8:17:00 PM
Thanks Jill, I went with a twist at the end.

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