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La Tour Eiffel

On the Champ de Mars (Beehive of activity) Stands an engineering feat Of latticed design Ridiculed architecture That survives the test of time. ------------------------------------ Form structure: 5-7-7-5-7-7 A 6 line Choka ------------------------------------ Contest: Choka Me Sponsor: Dr. Ram Mehta Placed: 6th

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/13/2020 2:11:00 PM

I've been clicking around in your back pages trying to find a poem I've not commented to. I am sure there have to be some, but not having luck finding one. Anyway, I look forward to seeing some of your new poetry. I was able to see my old comment I'd put on this one and the reply to me you had made (those I never see unless by chance like now!)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/13/2020 2:53:00 PM

Chuckling...I know what it's like...as if searching for a needle in a haystack...but I so appreciate your resilience, Andrea:) Warm regards // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 10/24/2014 6:15:00 AM

La tour Eiffel will survive for ever as a symbol and cultural icon of France. good write. Thanks:-) rajat

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2014 5:06:00 AM

Good day Rajat! Thank you for stopping by; I appreciate your visits and comments. Namaskar. // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/29/2014 10:24:00 AM

It has lasted which is surprising..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 4:03:00 PM

Very true, Sara....it lasted much longer than expected; after all it was supposed to be dismantled after a period of 20 years. Thank you for the visit. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/28/2014 11:50:00 PM

It has become beloved, maybe not by countrymen, but certainly around the globe. I enjoyed your poem. It was one of the joys for my daughter and me to see it with dancing lights at night. Good luck in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2014 4:06:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by again today, Connie. I too enjoyed those dancing sparkling lights...and so did many others [usually that sight forms part of a Paris by Night city tour.] // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/28/2014 1:53:00 AM

i always enjoy my visits to france and the wonder of this beauty is well expressed through your choka, paul.. cheers on your stunning win.. huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 6:06:00 AM

Thank you Nette! The tower and the other Parisian highlights cannot fail to remain imprinted in the mind...a remarkable city indeed! Have a lovely day...hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/27/2014 9:37:00 PM

Ridiculed maybe but EVERYONE knows it!!! BIG congrats on your description of a most interesting building.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2014 5:58:00 AM

Hi Andrea! The tower was ridiculed by those who opposed it citing the fact that it was not feasible, neither financially nor artistically. They claimed it would turn out to be a useless monstrous project. / Thanks for the visit and have a nice Sunday. // paul

Faye Gibson

Date: 9/27/2014 2:17:00 PM

Well done, Paul; a lovely read. Congrats.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 4:18:00 PM

Hi Faye! Thank you for stopping by; so glad that you enjoyed my humble Choka. Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/27/2014 10:00:00 AM

Brilliant choka Paul! Love ur poetic architecture my friend! Trust we all survive the rest of time! Congrats on big win!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 2:09:00 PM

Thank you Upma. The tower is both imposing and inspirational. The latticed framework is what captivated my eye most. Being on top of it is a fulfilling experience. Walking down hundreds of steps (instead of using the lift) was a personal challenge which I had dreamed of! // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/27/2014 8:47:00 AM

I so enjoyed reading this one again. Congratulations.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 9:23:00 AM

Thank you Richard for stopping by again with congrats. cu // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/27/2014 8:12:00 AM

I am so happy to see this choka on the winning list. Congratulations on your win Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 8:39:00 AM

Thank you Maurice:) Having Parisian roots, you must have been rooting for the Tour Eiffel! cu my friend. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/27/2014 6:15:00 AM

Congrats Paul..:) same spot huh?! ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 8:29:00 AM

Thank you Olive_eloi; hope all is well with you:) // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/27/2014 5:40:00 AM

Thanks for the entry and support. Congrats on the win, Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 8:23:00 AM

Many thanks Dr. Ram...it is an honour to get a spot on your winners' list. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 9/27/2014 2:31:00 AM

dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 9/27/2014 8:17:00 AM

Thank you Jan; you are always fast on the draw:) hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/25/2014 12:23:00 PM

How smoothly this reads. Not easily done in the constraints of this form. My mother was born and grew up in Paris. The last time I was there I was only seven. This is a wonderful write. I hope you rank high in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/25/2014 2:02:00 PM

Thank you for your positive comments, Maurice. I was unsure what to write about since a choka is supposed to be narrative. // So, thanks to your mother, you are half French! // Read your choka entry a while ago....very impressive. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/25/2014 9:20:00 AM

I would love to see it in person. I guess the one in Vegas doesn't count *lol*. I enjoyed your Choka, I would wish you luck but I don't think you will need it.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/25/2014 1:56:00 PM

As usual, Richard, you are a fountain of encouragement! I have travelled quite a bit, but this has been my first visit to Paris (although I've been to France several times). I had always taken the Eiffel tower for granted, but being there in person made all the difference. // paul

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/25/2014 2:26:00 AM

I have never been to Paris, but I've always admired the beauty of the Eiffel Tower. It would be an amazing sight to see in person!.... I really enjoyed this lovely poem, Paul. Good luck in Dr. Ram's contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/25/2014 1:49:00 PM

Hi Kelly! The tower itself is truly a sight to behold, but being on top of it brings awesome sensations. I love climbing to the top of high buildings (especially cathedrals) and mountains, and looking down on the scene below. makes me wish I had wings:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/25/2014 1:32:00 AM

the words as elegant and as magnificent as the Eiffel tower.. :) i love the line beehive of activity... :D !!!!! but still if i have chance I will still choose to visit disneyland above all.. :D :P

Paul Callus
Date: 9/25/2014 12:57:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments Olive_eloi!! But why not combine both places in one unforgettable Parisian visit!! :)) // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/24/2014 3:30:00 PM

This should do wonderfully in the contest Paul. It's so well written and educational at the same time.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2014 4:17:00 PM

Thank you Brenda; this is my first attempt at this form, so hopefully I made justice to it! // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/23/2014 5:07:00 PM

Wow, it would be a site I would love to see, it all its splendor and complexity. Awesome Choka, I think you will do fabulous my friend. hugsxx

Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 5:15:00 PM

Thank you for the trust you show in this write, Casarah! One day, when Abby is a bit older, it would be great to visit Paris and stop at Paris EuroDisney for a couple of days. That's what we did, and my granddaughter Valentina had the time of her life!! (I believe I did, too!!:)) hugs // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 9/23/2014 3:48:00 PM

clever write! I long to see it, my kids have, while I was home working to pay for their trip..lol.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 4:27:00 PM

Hi Barbara! This summer my family and I visited Paris and went up the Eiffel tower by lift...beautiful view; we split on the way down...they took the lift, I walked down the steps! // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 9/23/2014 3:04:00 PM

Very clever descriptive write Paul:-) Good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 9/23/2014 4:23:00 PM

We can but try Paul:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 4:22:00 PM

Thank you Jan! The sponsor is a tricky customer to please, especially in a few lines! Hugs // paul