Keep Out

KEEP OUT Sad years lay hidden in the crusted ochre bloodstains of rusted tears. 11/8/2016 submitted to – The Rusted Gate – Poetry Contest

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Constance La France

Date: 11/12/2016 8:04:00 PM

John congratulations on your win with this beautifully penned line ~

Jan Allison

Date: 11/12/2016 7:31:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats John:-) hugs Jan xx

Hansteven Selfa

Date: 11/12/2016 12:19:00 PM

I love to see good things come to good people. This is one of those times. Congratulations!

Sarita Milliner

Date: 11/12/2016 10:18:00 AM

Emotion felt through this great descriptive write! Congratulations!

Charlie Smith

Date: 11/12/2016 8:04:00 AM

Congratulations John, too many hearts lay closed behind such barriers...

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/11/2016 4:20:00 PM

Powerful imagery, John...Congratulations on your fine placement. Sandra

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/11/2016 2:48:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your winner..Congrats..Sara

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/11/2016 11:14:00 AM

very descriptive, john... congrats on your award!..huggs

Paul Callus

Date: 11/11/2016 8:29:00 AM

Wow...metaphorically beautiful, John! Congratulations on a very merited win. Regards // paul

Jean Murray

Date: 11/11/2016 6:35:00 AM

Your frisky muse raced over the finish line. Well done.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/10/2016 8:53:00 PM

Big emotion! Congrats, John!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/9/2016 3:52:00 PM

wow, great description. Also wanted to say how much i enjoyed your limerick. The one for Jan. It was probably the best one.

John Lawless
Date: 11/10/2016 8:51:00 AM

Thanks Andrea I hope the blushing smile of Autumn is being kind to you.

Jan Allison

Date: 11/8/2016 5:50:00 PM

deep and sad John I like your interpretation of the theme:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 11/10/2016 8:50:00 AM

Yeah Jan, those rusty gates always seem to say KEEP OUT but never explain why...Thanks for your support.

Chris Green

Date: 11/8/2016 5:16:00 PM

Sad but so very cool. Few words, heavy duty emotions. This one speaks to me John. Really nicely done

John Lawless
Date: 11/10/2016 8:48:00 AM

Thanks Chris, I've always been a sucker for a good metaphoric extrapolation of the simple. Did I just write that.....the muse is really feeling frisky this brisk morning....