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Just Wondering

I wonder how? I wonder why? Just listen well and discern clear, Urge you right now: open your eyes! Sense a ground swell that knows not fear, Thrill follows spill in some cheap talk. Wise is the man who knows the truth, Observe the chill as madness stalks; Note how you can stake out real proof, Deeds tell the tale where facts avail; Etch in your mind what hard work buys, Runaway sales cannot prevail! Invest not blind the empty highs, Nice is sweet spice that feels so good, Glimpse hollow prize that kills your mood! Leon Enriquez 03 September 2015 Singapore

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Leon Enriquez

Date: 9/9/2015 8:38:00 PM

Dear Josefina: Answer No. 5: Sorry I forgot one last thing: After you've finished writing the 3 quatrains and 1 couplet, remember to keep the 14 lines together without any spaces. That's all run-on without any breaks throughout the poem. So, there you have it. Enjoy yourself, OK? All the best then, Leon.

Josefina Costales

Date: 9/5/2015 10:18:00 AM

Following this thread..I tried to do a sonnet (3 quatrains, and 2 additional lines - total 14 lines). The last 2 would not qualify as couplet I know as they don't rhyme. And the quatrains do not rhyme at all- but they're all 7 syllable per line. [see NIRVANA]. So maybe someone is shaking his head why I'm labeling it a sonnet (rhyming you said is not compulsory, so I took the line of least resistance)...but I had fun letting thoughts run away!

Leon Enriquez
Date: 9/5/2015 11:43:00 AM

Dear Josefina: If you want to see how an un-rhymed sonnet looks like, may I suggest you take a look at my poem entitled "Birthday Greetings" which I wrote for my son's birthday on August 28/29 post on PoetrySoup. Leon

Josefina Costales
Date: 9/5/2015 11:06:00 AM

Sorry I didn't get your "cryptic" message, but am not that political minded, though.And thanks for the comment to Nirvana. Maybe sometime I can write a proper sonnet.

Leon Enriquez
Date: 9/5/2015 10:57:00 AM

Dear Josefina: This poem is about our Singapore General Elections 2015, and our Polling Day is set for September 11th. I wrote this to urge my fellow Singaporeans to Vote Wisely for the incumbent government of the day! Cryptic isn't it? Leon

Leon Enriquez
Date: 9/5/2015 10:54:00 AM

Dear Josefina: That's a great start! Keep writing and you will get the power. All the best, Leon.

Josefina Costales

Date: 9/4/2015 12:28:00 PM

Omigosh, I am so awed you took the time to reply to my "wonderings". I am with you there that we should write to pleasure our own tastes. I only hope that when I get the courage to try to write a sonnet that I can do justice to your helpful advice. Thanks.

Josefina Costales
Date: 9/4/2015 12:29:00 PM

Oh and one thing more..were you writing about financial trading? Or I am so way off from my interpretation.

Leon Enriquez

Date: 9/4/2015 10:16:00 AM

Answer No. 4: After all I write for my own pleasure, and I think that you should too. :) and, I think you should have fun in your own writes. What people say is not all that important. You write for your own satisfaction you know. Hope this helps you, my friend. If you are still not sure, take a look at what I have done to the so-called "sonnet form" and then write your own. We are not winning awards for literary excellence, only expressing what we feel. All the best then, Leon. (Ends)

Leon Enriquez

Date: 9/4/2015 10:14:00 AM

Answer No.3: This means, if you start the 1st line with 8-syllables, then follow this with each of the 14 lines. Caution: Many well-meaning people will tell you that you are wrong if you do not follow the 10- syllable count. To me, this is absurd. We need to fit the form to suit our style, and not just conform because of the rule book! And doing the iambic pentameter? Come on, who does that today? That's my take. (Contd 4)

Leon Enriquez

Date: 9/4/2015 10:13:00 AM

Answer No.2: For instance, I've used 5-syllables, and my favourite 8-syllables (the hexameter). Sometimes I use 6- or 7- or even 4-syllables per line. Only rarely do I write with 10-syllables (the pentameter) which is said to be the "correct form of sonnet" and invented by William Shakespeare who died some 400+ years ago! BTW, he borrowed from the Italian, and then changed it to suit his style! Keep each line to the syllable count you select. (Contd 3)

Leon Enriquez

Date: 9/4/2015 10:11:00 AM

Dear Josefina: Answer No.1: Thank you for asking. OK, here's my take. Forget about all you hear about what a sonnet should be. Only start writing with 14 lines max. Write 3 quatrains (4 lines/ quatrain). Then write a couplet (2 lines/ couplet). Rhymes not compulsory. I think that for the number of syllables in each line, you decide. (Contd 2)

Josefina Costales

Date: 9/4/2015 9:55:00 AM

I went to my inbox, but I didn't see your soupmail. sorry..

Leon Enriquez
Date: 9/4/2015 12:10:00 PM

Dear Josefina: Here are my comments to your questions. Hope this helps. Leon

Leon Enriquez
Date: 9/4/2015 10:17:00 AM

Dear Josefina: Here are the my thoughts to your question. Hope this helps. Leon

Leon Enriquez
Date: 9/4/2015 10:07:00 AM

Dear Josefina: My apologies. I am not able to send you a Soup Mail. I just don't know why. May I suggest you send me one instead and I will reply with my comments. Thank you. Leon

Josefina Costales

Date: 9/3/2015 10:37:00 PM

I'm trying to learn how to write a sonnet, haven't done one yet. I did a quick google to read about the basics, such as (correct me if I've misread) - 14 lines, iambic pentameter, with rhymes but would not be of course more than 7--my question: can one deviate from the meter (i.e., not all lines in iambic). Form aside, am I right in reading this as a sort of take on financial trading. Thanks for your insights.

Leon Enriquez
Date: 9/4/2015 9:29:00 AM

Dear Josefina: Thank you. Please take a look at the Soup Mail that I am sending you. Hope this helps. All the best, Leon.

Josefina Costales
Date: 9/3/2015 10:38:00 PM

Just wondering..:)