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Just Dreaming

Walk along the shore with me and let me see you smile Close your eyes and visualize a romantic tropical isle Palm trees and a summer breeze, sunshine overhead Conversation with only our eyes, nothing being said A secluded beach just out of reach, the surf the only sound Two hearts one in the summer sun, a blanket on the ground A sailboat dancing on the horizon, sun is going down Tropical evening, harbor lights, as we walk back to town Was it real or was I just dreaming as we walk along And as we walk, the ocean singing her enchanting song Feel the sand between our toes and taste the salty air A falling star streaks across the sky going God knows where You touch my heart and my soul in this island Paradise The reflection of the Southern Cross in your loving eyes

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 2/17/2009 8:15:00 PM
Very poetic vibrant images, thanks for commenting on my gibbous moon poem
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Date: 2/17/2009 1:05:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this sonnet, and love your unusual meter. Lovely imagery captured in your lines.
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Date: 1/7/2009 3:34:00 PM
lovely rhythm and great image, love it....always Maryam
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Date: 12/3/2008 5:20:00 AM
Lovely flow and rhyming... full of gentle emotion and splendid imagery. Well done!! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 11/3/2008 7:55:00 AM
Lines 5 and 7 would fit if you simply take "A" out that starts those lines.
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Date: 11/3/2008 7:38:00 AM
You have a beautiful poems it it's not a Sonnet. Sonnets are done in 10 soft hard syllable per line. This is neither. Your meter lines 1,2,3,6,8 &11 are written in a meter called trochee which is a hard soft meter and the opposite of iambic. It's a much hard and richer meter then iambic. If you make the rest of this poem the same and keep it the length you have it now You'd have written a poem far above the abilities of most. I've give you a 7 simply because of the potential this poem has.
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Date: 9/26/2008 11:30:00 AM
Dear Vincce: This a very beautiful and romantic love poem. I can picrture myself in the same spot with my own love. Thanks for reading my poem. I'm glad you liked it. I wrote another poem titled Am I Dreaming? Try Destiny, my first and my best poem. Sincerely, Janice Herzog xoxo
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Date: 9/17/2008 4:14:00 AM
Extremely well written. Thank you for sharing it.
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Date: 9/15/2008 1:15:00 PM
truely beautiful poem take care Crystalx
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Date: 9/13/2008 12:59:00 PM
what a beautifully writtrn love poem, very eloquent, take care D-nyce
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Date: 9/12/2008 8:18:00 PM
Vince BRAVO - absolutely amazing rhyme and flow with outstanding imaginary - Vince thank you for your friendship and support of my poetry - May God bless you and your family always
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Date: 9/12/2008 1:48:00 PM
after reading this, wished I had a beach to walk on, to look at the ocean. this was a warm piece you write so well. thank you for reading my poem and for your comment
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Date: 9/12/2008 1:10:00 PM
That's a great write Vince...Images and feelings...Thank you for sharing... TYOne, Farah
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Date: 9/12/2008 8:38:00 AM
This is superb on every conceivable level. Very well written and so picturesque. Great atmosphere, romantic and need I go on? Very, very well done. Regards Heidie
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Date: 9/12/2008 3:50:00 AM
Oh, man! I wanna come along! Please God, let me go there!!! One day....one day I shall see that southern cross from out atop the deep blue...lovely images here, sigh, Kristin
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Date: 9/11/2008 3:44:00 PM
Hey Vince, way to go my friend! This reminds me of Jamaica in the Caribbean. I just love the beach and the clear sea with the sun set. The images are wonderful. This is memory refreshing. Thanks for your thoughts and prayers. My surgery is tomorrow at 11:00 a.m. Great job! ~Joseph
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Date: 9/11/2008 12:18:00 PM
Gosh Vince, what are you trying to do - depress us all? ~lol~ Just teasing. Too beautiful and man oh man do I wish I was there. What a gorgeous sonnet! Just breathtaking. Love, Shar
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Date: 9/11/2008 11:51:00 AM
This poem made me drift into dreams....It is enriched with beautiful senses that made the poem come alive....Lovely write, as always....Sara...
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Date: 9/11/2008 10:42:00 AM
Great piece , Vince and great dream to enjoy !!! ... Now back to the nightmare of real world , UCKKKK !!! . PS , Love all the song titles in this pece ....
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Date: 9/11/2008 10:04:00 AM
This is a dream worth keeping! I hope I dream of this same place tonight! Lovely escape!...nicely done!~ Carrie
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