Just 14 Years Old

Just 14 years old Ripe and ready to mold Searching for love She was unaware She was never told Her story I will unfold… Scarred and out of control Fragile and naïve, yet bold She believed all the lies he sold On her finger he placed gold He promised her love More than she could ever dream of… Guidance she lacks Violence and pain she attracts He stopped her dead in her tracks Her body he attacked Her heart he cracked Her face he smacked Her eyes he blacked Her mind he whacked Her life he trapped… Just 14 years old She grew cold She could not be consoled Her future untold… Lay

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Mary Meade Stephenson

Date: 12/22/2010 7:19:00 PM

This is a very profound write that speaks to me on many levels...it reminds me of past experiences that transpired in my own life at age 14. Keep writing because it has been my venting/healing mechanism and has kept me sane!! I am sure many will be deeply touched. Thanks so much for sharing your soul...and for taking the time to read my writes. God Bless~Mary~

Audrey Haick

Date: 12/20/2010 11:28:00 AM

Profound write, Lay..well executed and grabs one's attention..So sad for a young girl only 14. Blessings, peace, joy and love to you this season and always, Lay. Love, Audrey

John Loving Iii

Date: 12/19/2010 1:23:00 PM

nice narative. john

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 12/19/2010 5:27:00 AM

Great theme and topic people should be more aware of...a very well written piece...Michael

Francine Roberts

Date: 12/18/2010 9:57:00 PM

powerful piece Lay, terrible topic , you have penned it wonderfully though

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 12/18/2010 6:40:00 PM

once again you have the ability to strike the reader with your words...not just present them. The subject matter is horrific and terrrifying to say the very least. Your presentation is striking to the heart. You have a calling I believe. Thanks you for your comments. i will be contacting you by soup mail in the near future and we'll discuss matters over a coffee. Your poetry friend Bob

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/18/2010 3:41:00 PM

poor thing sounds like the victim of a polygamous cult or something. Great monorhyme in the ending part! Luv, Andrea

Richard Pickett

Date: 12/18/2010 2:15:00 PM

Lay in this life these stories are told so to often,Being a Christian man and Father, my heart bleeds, and being the Father of 10 and 7 being girls, what can I say.... Even being Christian I find it hard to show restraint ..God Bless you....Taz

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/18/2010 10:25:00 AM

Oh, Lay, my heart goes out to this poor girl. When a child experiences such abuse, it is hard for her to reopen her heart. Very moving poem -- this happens so often. Peace and blessings, Carolyn