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Jujitsu Dojo

We strike out on objective clash Were set to meet, make it brash She throws an elbow, i duck the might Tackle waist first Still delite in sight Wrap an arm, advance position Shes still a girl With the greatest ambition

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Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/15/2012 1:01:00 PM

So is this an exhibition fight or are you wanting to ask her out on a date after you let her look warrior-like? This is fun and flirtatious!...I am not an experienced writer...wondering,...do you leave off apostrophes on purpose? I've seen other poets do this...others like myself don't know any difference...Gwendolen

Justin Debrosse
Date: 5/15/2012 1:09:00 PM

haha maybe its a combination of both experiences at once..about the grammar, sometimes you disregard it maybe thats what makes poetry so uninhibited. Although to make money writing you have to do more technical papers and follow the book of "standards". thanks for checking this one!