Jueju

In the shifting paradigm Where change coexists with time My thoughts simply spin away All colour gone, left with grey Play my part, false face and mime Woken briefly by the chime The start of another day Cog in wheel, simple relay Manage to get past the line Read the fine print then I sign Not concerned with the array Just facade and good display Cannot fall if I don't climb Do not see the dirt and grime Guarded from the full dismay Sleep on, it will be okay Write A Jueju-Qijue Poetry Contest 2nd April 2023 Sponsored by: Emile Pinet

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Suzette Richards

Date: 5/25/2023 3:07:00 AM

Another great write from your aurum pen, DD. You write poetry that we can identify with, and with a 'wish I had said that' quality. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Suzette

Suzette Richards
Date: 5/25/2023 3:32:00 AM

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/25/2023 3:10:00 AM

Ooh I looked up the Latin and thank you for your high praise :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/24/2023 7:22:00 AM

Congratulations on this winning work in Emile's contest. Way to go. Creative work for sure. Sara

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/24/2023 7:43:00 AM

Thank you Sara, I appreciate your support

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/23/2023 2:51:00 PM

wow, GREAT write, Dilly Dally. Congrats on top spot

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/23/2023 2:53:00 PM

Many thanks Andrea, thank you for your support

Emile Pinet

Date: 5/22/2023 10:45:00 AM

Congratulations Dilly! Your amazing poem "Jueju", has placed "First" in my contest. You did very well, for I was strict; yet your poem rose to the top of the podium. Excellent writing, my friend, Emile.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 5/22/2023 10:53:00 AM

Hurray, thank you! I enjoyed writing this one, thank you for your kind words :)

Paul Willason

Date: 4/2/2023 3:41:00 PM

Another of your poems inhabiting the world between sleep and being awake. I like the line, "Play my part, false face and mime". Gives voice to the tension that exists between the authentic self and the one we parade as a mask of protection. Engaging poem exploring identity. Enjoyed.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/2/2023 10:38:00 PM

Thanks Paul, this was a very quick write but perhaps influenced by the ideas that had floated around previously. I appreciate you stopping to read and comment