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Goliath stood up straight and tall But David knew that he would fall Goliath was stoned And everyone groaned His shoelace tripped him after all!

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Date: 8/26/2022 9:03:00 AM
Ahh Rico, I always wondered how David brought him down ! Your poem is a revelation. Each of your poems invite thought from the reader and are thoroughly enjoyable.
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Rico Leffanta
Date: 8/26/2022 10:23:00 AM
Thank you for ready and commenting, Wendy! Much appreciated! Aloha!
Date: 8/21/2022 8:21:00 AM
Love this one!
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Rico Leffanta
Date: 8/21/2022 10:50:00 AM
I thought about naming it, "Sundae School" as it reminds children of the importance of tying their shoes, but then wondered what child today laces their shoes? Aloha!
Date: 8/20/2022 9:21:00 PM
You have given an interesting version to the David- Goliath story in your own unique way ! Enjoyed it, Rico
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Rico Leffanta
Date: 8/21/2022 10:51:00 AM
Anything to keep you happy! Aloha!
Date: 8/20/2022 2:39:00 PM
perfect title, as always, rico! love the double meaning of stoned (or is that just me?)...
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Rico Leffanta
Date: 8/21/2022 10:49:00 AM
"Goliath was stoned" is about the only thing Middle Easterners agree upon! Thank you for reading and commenting! Aloha!
Date: 8/20/2022 2:16:00 PM
Love the giant and the shoelace ! What will be next ? Only your inner mind knows. Always love your imagination Rico ! Hugs, Susan :)
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Rico Leffanta
Date: 8/21/2022 10:48:00 AM
Nothing compares with your, "Dust in the Wind!" Aloha!
Date: 8/20/2022 10:16:00 AM
Aw, this is funny! You have a fascinating sense of humor, Rico, and I can't figure out how you come up with these!
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Rico Leffanta
Date: 8/21/2022 10:48:00 AM
No telephone, so my train of thought is seldom interrupted. Thank you for reading and commenting! Aloha!

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