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Janus Element

Tendrils twist and dance, guiltless, unblamed, getaway vehicle, of the flame- uncharged of previous transpyre, that's your game. Like a serpent you shed your skin of the shame of the red-handed fire. You greasy sleaze, you leave yourself lingering, advertising yourself on the byways, but coy- like a transmitted disease. Perhaps Prometheus will give you a place to lay low till things cool down. Maybe Haefestus knows what to do with your sort. I think you should go to Hades, for swaying every which way the wind blows, you two faced liar. But wouldn't it also be fitting if you went back to Aphrodite's Temple and returned to those choking on the burnt offerings- of their lust- choking out true desire.

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Date: 3/24/2024 6:44:00 PM
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Date: 3/24/2024 7:52:00 AM
From me your poem captures a visceral and raw depiction of betrayal and deceit, using vivid imagery and metaphorical language to convey the speaker's emotions. The use of "tendrils" and "flame" metaphorically represents the insidious nature of guilt and the act of escaping responsibility. The comparison of the betrayer to a serpent shedding its skin evokes a sense of cunning and deceit, while also highlighting the desire to rid oneself of shame.
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Jude Herrick
Date: 3/24/2024 6:45:00 PM
Thank you, silent One.
Date: 3/24/2024 2:47:00 AM
Oh this is beyond brilliant dear jude. I love it! I love your opening line, and kind of fits also my last poem, like it is on same theme, and yours more eloquent and powerful! I love your mention of hades and how youv described this two faced liar, they have no shame and they do what they want, “ But wouldn't it also be fitting if you went back to Aphrodite's Temple and returned to those choking on the burnt offerings- ” how clever! I always love a poem with mythology. you did it effortlessly. Fave
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Jude Herrick
Date: 3/24/2024 2:56:00 AM
Thank you, Ink Empress. I love mythology as well. The constellations and endless story wheel. The elements, the raw magic with a thunderous appeal.

Book: Shattered Sighs