Its Dark

I'ts dark in here I'ts really dark You left without dropping a light How can i see? I’m falling apart Your eyes makes me rise Your deep dark eyes Only i can see through I need someone I need help I need you you Please come get me out, Out of this cage called love, I'ts my worst nightmare , I wish it was a dream, But it’s really not, Now, i call for the ocean with it’s moving body, The dancing trees where have thou gone? You seem to have forgotten thy precious one.

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Valsa George

Date: 5/4/2024 10:47:00 PM

When a loved one deserts us, we feel we are thrown into total darkness. But the hope that the love will be renewed keeps us going or after sometime, so many other occupations come into our lives and we forget our past pain. I am sure by now after 8 years you must have recovered from the sad memories of your loss. Glad i could comment on your first poem.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/2/2024 6:37:00 PM

An excellent first offering to the Soup. I’m surprised I’m reading this 8 years later. Thanks for your visit.

Tonye George
Date: 4/13/2024 5:19:00 AM

Thank you Richy

Tom Woody

Date: 3/20/2024 1:33:00 PM

Hey Tonje. Didn't realize you've been around a bit. 8 years wow. You've really improved with time. We all have

Tonye George
Date: 3/20/2024 2:15:00 PM

Lol Tom. Yes I have been around for a while now. And I'm glad you're part of the process.

Moon Flower

Date: 6/24/2016 10:38:00 AM

That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Tonye. :)

Tonye George
Date: 6/29/2016 8:43:00 AM

thank you very much

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/23/2016 9:11:00 PM

Tonye, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Tonye George
Date: 6/29/2016 8:45:00 AM

thank you very much... i read your poem "sex after 40"... it was really nice.

Skat A

Date: 6/23/2016 3:16:00 PM

OMG... Tonye.... This is the best rant of today... I give it a high 7. Hope it makes it to poem of the week...skat

Tonye George
Date: 6/29/2016 8:46:00 AM

thanks a lot... thank you