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Into the Sunset

We are facing the sunset, in the afternoon light, while shadows stretch eastward over the hills. Music selected from the radio waves has blinded my senses in reverie's glare. Wind stirs a memory, that hijacks our car, sifting through windows to sharpen the air. Against the orange brilliance, that is stinging my eyes, someone I remember is saying goodbye. I thought I'd forgiven, the years and the cost, of saying farewell, as I watched those days die, but the ghost of my spirit, had nearly been lost. Now roads I travel, are smoother than then... with faded old lines, bleached by the sun, tall weeds and boulders, lining each shoulder just as they did when that story began. Faded with time, and jade are the hills, surrounding the highway, I remember so well. Grasses snake down, into rocky dry slopes, far into horizons where the sun disappears. Just when you think, a wound is forgotten, you're facing the sunset, of a new summer solstice. You remember the dust and a place we pulled over, where we looked up the hill, through a break in the trees Where we mimicked the sun with enormous goodbyes The radio plays many songs of regret and rejection still stings, with the same blinding pain. Burning bright on the rise, of so many farewells, where the haze of the sunset, was never the same. Light rolls around, to the place it is from unreeling those things, which can't be undone. Now I reach for the hand, of the one that I will love who was there, in the shadows for our life to begin I have never forgotten, but forgiveness will come It will follow the asphalt, slowly into the sun
--------------------------------------------------------------- For Contest: "Sunset" Sponsor: Skat

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 2/22/2015 6:51:00 PM
Love the story line, congrats :)
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Date: 2/22/2015 12:21:00 PM
Many congrats Carrie this is so beautiful:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 2/22/2015 8:51:00 AM
the story line within the poem is beautifully and heartfelt. Wonderful writing!!! Congratulations on your win !!
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Date: 2/22/2015 8:52:00 AM
*beautifully told... sorry lol
Date: 2/22/2015 6:41:00 AM
My warm congratulations on your super win my dear friend, Carrie! I'm so delighted to read your excellent write tonight. I love it and so enjoyed. Thanks a lot for sharing! Hugs and cheers! love lots, Leonora
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Date: 2/21/2015 10:22:00 PM
Carrie, CONGRATS on your win ~ SKAT ~
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Date: 2/21/2015 8:55:00 PM
Lovely win Carrie... PD
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Date: 2/21/2015 3:55:00 PM
Beautiful Carrie. Congrats on the win
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Date: 2/21/2015 3:36:00 PM
So beautiful, deep and so wonderfully written, Carrie. Congratulations on your 1st Place win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/21/2015 12:55:00 PM
Carrie, thank you for entering this one in my contest. Very well written. Congrats.
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Date: 9/17/2014 9:28:00 PM
You turned the sting of rejection into beautiful verse.... Great writing, Carrie... Love ya.... Jake
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Date: 9/13/2014 5:29:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie, another stunning poem in this contest. Loved the story you have told
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Date: 9/13/2014 8:43:00 AM
Dear Carrie, I bow at your poetic feet. Love it. Would love to meet you in person some day...you feel like a kindred soul. Congratulations.
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Date: 9/13/2014 8:13:00 AM
You have a way of pulling us into your picture. Lovely piece, congratulations.
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Date: 9/13/2014 7:53:00 AM
Excellent write, Carrie! Congratulations on your great win! Pandita
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Date: 9/12/2014 9:09:00 PM
Thoughtful n deep indeed is ur write Carrie! Loved the second n fifth stanza the most! Congrats on huge win!
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Date: 9/12/2014 10:37:00 AM
Hi Carrie, this is deep, Congratulations, with your awesome rejection poem.... LOVE LINDA
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Date: 9/12/2014 9:42:00 AM
Dropping again to congratulate you, carrie
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Date: 9/12/2014 6:03:00 AM
Such a beautiful poem Carrie. Congratulations on your 1st place.
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Date: 9/11/2014 10:51:00 PM
I love this. Thank you for entering the contest and congratulations. Love and prayers and God bless you, Gina
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Date: 9/9/2014 9:53:00 AM
Wonderful imagery penned so well - quite a moody write, Carrie
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Date: 9/9/2014 9:41:00 AM
Sorta sad... with a happy ending... what more could one want! Terry
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Date: 9/8/2014 10:07:00 PM
amazing imagery. the flow rolls of the tongue this is an excellent piece.
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