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Saw the 'Windswept Man' on Market Street The scene wrapped up in reggae sounds Moments became magical Existence happened briefly, I felt there As a student I'd walk that street daily If I cut across town my bus was 20 minutes quicker At one point I worked at the other end of the street I rarely go now But my daughter said... "Is it too late to go into town and get a waffle cone" And I said... "Let's go" It's sensorially full on Every few steps smells different Mostly unpleasant (Apart from a sweet corn cart I refuse to buy from) There were free Magnum's at the station Dress sense was anything goes Couples seem to emanate dynamics You can step into worlds of light and dark As each shop creates it's vibe We saw a candyfloss machine creating flowers I wanted more from being back But my existence was fleeting And after it was over I felt quietly out of place I can't suppose an answer to that... We're out again today I must look out for myself See if I'm there Some kind of smelling salts Created from energy And the history of my own footsteps Bringing me round

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Date: 3/17/2024 10:17:00 PM
You captured the sense of half formed thoughts, feelings bubbling beneath the surface, a dazzling mix of sensory inputs mirroring real life....almost, almost coagulating into a whole. The poem is alive and immediate.
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Date: 3/18/2024 1:10:00 AM
Thank you Paul, I appreciate you stopping by and spending time with my words - whether that on the cusp feeling can ever tip into something more seems unlikely, although writing in the moment sometimes feels like it's almost in grasp before I forget again. Just a funny way the poetic muse works with the sub conscious but an interesting interplay none the less
Date: 3/17/2024 11:45:00 AM
I find it troublesome at times to find a title, A Windswept Man, great title. Sensorial a great word and is key to what we can become. A wonderful piece of Bio.
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Date: 3/17/2024 12:07:00 PM
Thank you Anaya, there wasn't quite a concrete thought in this one - more a feeling I couldn't convey. Thank you for your encouraging words as always x
Date: 3/17/2024 4:06:00 AM
Time and place and people. Your time came and went, and now it's your daughter's time. Time changes things for us, but the memories stay strong. Isn't it great our footsteps are trod in history.
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Date: 3/17/2024 7:31:00 AM
You say the sweetest things Paul :) thank you - mostly - for your comment ;)

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