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Inside My Self

Bottled up inside Are things Ill never say, The feelings that I hide, The lines you never read maybe you can see it in my eyes, or Read it on my face, but Trapped inside are lies, Of the past I can't replace With memories that linger, And won't seem to go away, Why is it I can't I be happier? Today's a brand new day Yesterdays are over Even if the hurting is not, Nothing lasts forever, so I must cherish what I've got but Don't take my love for granted, For soon it will be gone, All you've ever wanted, Of the love you thought you won The feelings I have now Won't disappear overnight, But somehow, someway I believe everything will be alright

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 6/11/2015 1:52:00 PM
This is awesome, I like it very much
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Date: 6/10/2015 8:09:00 PM
Hello, Back to give some feedback. I can see that this is an honest write. It can be strengthened by reducing the amount of filler words... like "the." Ask yourself if every "the" you have in this poem is really necessary."The" feelings or just feelings? & to intensify the emotion, you could consider, "Even if 'this' hurting is not." This indicates an immediate and active moment, current situation and is more personal than "the." I hope you have read some or all of the other workshop poems.
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Date: 6/10/2015 12:24:00 PM
Hello, Alainey, I have closed the workshop and hopefully other soupers will come in and give some feedback, too. Also, please visit either my blog with the links or go to the member contest winners page and use the links there to the other workshop participants and try to provide feedback to the other participating poets. Thank you. Cyndi
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Date: 6/9/2015 11:41:00 PM
thanks for sharing your feelings.
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Date: 5/15/2015 7:48:00 PM
How does being a 'soldier of God' have anything to do with the rest of the verse? Are we to assume God wants your suffering? Don't double space unless you are doing it for emphasis. Why are Read & Trapped capitalized? Only capitalize the beginning of a sentence & proper nouns. Light & Love
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Date: 4/26/2015 3:57:00 PM
this is very deep and sad - we all have regrets over things we did or did not do or said or did not say - not just to our children but to others in our lives - :-( Hugs Jan xx
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